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It is often cited that “Not everything that is learned is contained in books”. According to many, we learn most of the things from our own experience while others believe that books are our main source of knowledge. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v.1

It is often cited that “Not everything that is learned is contained in books”. According to many, we learn most of the things from our own experience while others believe that books are our main source of knowledge. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 1
Knowledge is a very important aspect of our daily lives. Its application helps us go through life with fewer hitches. As the saying goes, “knowledge is power”. Therefore, in our society, today, the most knowledgeable person is considered to be the most powerful. Knowledge can be obtained from life experiences or from reading books. In my opinion, one cannot depend on either of the two in isolation. The best is to make use of both at times of need. First and foremost, before an individual is able to read and write, one must obtain knowledge through life experiences. For example, children begin to learn right from the day they are born. A child learns how to sit, stand, develop a sense to distinguish the right from the wrong and so on. This learning experience is necessary for the child’s development. Secondly, as the child grows, he/she develops qualities such as compassion, empathy, friendliness and so on. These qualities are not learned in books but can only be obtained through life experiences. On the other hand, formal education is obtained by attending classes and reading books. This aspect of learning is equally important for an individual’s future career. For instance, as a doctor, I am only able to keep myself updated by reading up on various changes on diagnosis and management of various diseases so as to offer my patients comprehensive care. In conclusion, knowledge learned from life experiences is as important as knowledge acquired from reading books. The former helps one develop certain human characteristics which are informal whereas the latter helps one achieve a target career goal.
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, the most knowledgeable person
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on. This learning
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On the other hand
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reading
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. This aspect of learning is
equally
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for an individual’s future career.
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myself updated by
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up on various
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on diagnosis and management of various diseases
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so as to
offer my patients comprehensive care.

In conclusion
,
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knowledge
learned from
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experiences
is as
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acquired from
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. The former
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helps
one develop certain human characteristics which are informal whereas the latter
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one achieve a target career goal.
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A new language is a new life.
Persian Proverb

IELTS essay It is often cited that “Not everything that is learned is contained in books”. According to many, we learn most of the things from our own experience while others believe that books are our main source of knowledge. Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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