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Some people think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extend to you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. v. 1
One of the most conspicuous trends in today's world is combustion vehicles. Some people believe that increase in fuel prices can reduce carbon emission from transportation. On the other hand, others argue that it will increase the release of greenhouse gases and it does no good of the environment. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will explain that increase in fuel prices cannot reduce ecological problems. Firstly, crude oil is the main source of fuel available for mass transportation in the current world; however, increasing crude oil prices can even worst the current situation because it is the only reliable gas source. In addition, no matter how expensive the oil cost consumers can afford to purchase until an alternative is provided by the public administrators. For instance, increase in taxation for tobacco goods did not reduce its sales and the same will happen for fuel as well. Secondly, scientists should focus more on the Eco friendly renewable source of energy transportation to help the environment. Furthermore, the government should impose strict laws and provide more public transportation to reduce carbon footprint. For example, Tesla invented electric cars that can perform with electric power source, which is renewable and zero carbon emission. Hence, step by step we can eliminate the greenhouse gas release for clean and green atmosphere. In conclusion, one can clearly understand that we have to create green energy with available sources with no harm done in the air and people. Finally, the role of the environment is too dire to ignore.
One of the most conspicuous trends in
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today
's world is combustion vehicles.
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Some
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people
believe that
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increase
in
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fuel
prices can
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reduce
carbon emission from
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transportation
.
On the other hand
, others argue that it will
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increase
the release of greenhouse gases and it does no
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good
of the environment. As such, there are both merits and demerits for this trend, this essay will
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explain
that
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increase
in
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fuel
prices cannot
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reduce
ecological problems.

Firstly
, crude oil is the main
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source
of
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fuel
available for mass
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transportation
in the
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current
world;
however
, increasing crude oil prices can even worst the
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current
situation
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because
it is the
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only
reliable gas
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source
.
In addition
, no matter how expensive the oil cost consumers can afford to
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purchase
until an alternative
is provided
by the public administrators.
For instance
,
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increase
in taxation for tobacco
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goods
did not
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reduce
its sales and the same will happen for
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fuel
as well
.

Secondly
, scientists should focus more on the Eco friendly renewable
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source
of energy
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transportation
to
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help
the environment.
Furthermore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should impose strict laws and provide more public
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transportation
to
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reduce
carbon footprint.
For example
, Tesla invented electric cars that can perform with electric power
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source
, which is renewable and zero carbon emission.
Hence
, step by step we can eliminate the greenhouse gas release for clean and green atmosphere.

In conclusion
, one can
clearly
understand that we
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have to
create green energy with available
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sources
with no harm done in the air and
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people
.
Finally
, the role of the environment is too dire to
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ignore
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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