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some people think that one of the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extend do you agree or disagree? v.2

some people think that one of the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 2
In this contemporary era, environmental problems have become controversial issues in human society. A group of people believes that if authorities will increase the cost of gasoline for private vehicles, then, the environment complication will be decreased. In my viewpoint, it may assist to some extent, however, this is not the only solution to tackle these environmental issues. To embark with, increasing price of petrol can reduce the environmental pollution to some degree. In other words, excessive usage of cars release carbon dioxide into atmosphere which is detrimental to the natural world. If the price of gasoline is hiked, individuals will start to use their vehicles less often and this in turn can decelerate the rate of the air population. Nevertheless, the increase in fossil fuel prices will not stop environment pollution. Furthermore, the fuel prices determines the market price of other essential commodities such as transport, medical and food, and increasing the price can affect poor and middle-class families. On the other hand, law enforcement agencies can take other measure to mitigate these problems. A better solution is to invest in renewable energy sources such as wind, solar and tidal waves rather than non-renewable resources likes coal and petrol. For instance, solar power in the United States has proven its efficiency in every production. Besides this, by improving public transport and reducing the cost of traveling, the government can encourage more common people to use public transportation. In other words, this practice assists clear environment and reduce traffic congestion in cities. To conclude, I strongly believe that the hike in the fossil fuel is not the best solution to global environmental problems. Improving the efficiency of public transport and investing in renewable energy sources are better alternatives that ought to be considered.
In this contemporary era,
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environmental
problems have become controversial issues in human society. A group of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believes that if authorities will increase the cost of gasoline for private vehicles, then, the environment complication will
be decreased
. In my viewpoint, it may assist to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent,
however
, this is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
solution to tackle these
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environmental
issues.

To embark with, increasing
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price
of petrol can
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reduce
the
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environmental
pollution to
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some
degree. In
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other
words, excessive usage of cars release carbon dioxide into atmosphere which is detrimental to the natural world. If the
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price
of gasoline
is hiked
, individuals will
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start
to
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use
their vehicles less
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often
and this in turn can decelerate the rate of the air population.
Nevertheless
, the increase in fossil fuel
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prices
will not
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stop
environment pollution.
Furthermore
, the fuel
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prices
determines the market
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price
of
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other
essential commodities such as transport, medical and food, and increasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
can affect poor and middle-
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class
families.

On the
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other
hand, law enforcement agencies can take
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
measure to mitigate these problems. A better solution is to invest in renewable energy sources such as wind, solar and tidal waves
rather
than non-renewable resources likes coal and petrol.
For instance
, solar power in the United States has proven its efficiency in every production.
Besides
this, by improving public transport and reducing the cost of traveling, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can encourage more common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
public transportation. In
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other
words, this practice assists
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
environment and
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reduce
traffic congestion in cities.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that the hike in the fossil fuel is not the best solution to global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
problems. Improving the efficiency of public transport and investing in renewable energy sources are better alternatives that ought to
be considered
.
17Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that one of the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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