Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

More and more people have pets in their homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having pets? v.1

More and more people have pets in their homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having pets? v. 1
It is true that the number of household pets has been increasing dramatically in recent years. While producing numerous benefits, this trend also brings some potential drawbacks. On the one hand, keeping domestic pets could benefits both owners and pets themself. There is no point in denying that pet animals’ loyalty and characteristic have the healing power, which could relieve stress and bring great happiness for pet owners, especially those who always caught up in their own work and study. Therefore, adopting pets in house is becoming increasingly prevalent in the hustle and bustle in the new era. Besides, raising pets also stand them in good stead due to the fact that pet animals like cats and dogs are less likely to survive on their own in the natural environment, where they have to encounter the difficulties and hazards without any helps from human beings. Consequently, if they are forced to live in the wild environment, then they would easily suffer from diseases or even die unexpectedly. On the other hand, apart from these above – mentioned benefits, adopting household pets also place those animals and owners at a disadvantage. Firstly, it comes with no surprise that animal themselves could bring many viruses or bacterial diseases, which could harm their owners seriously. Toxoplasmosis, for example, is the disease caused by parasite called toxoplasma gondii, which has been found in warm-blood animals like cats and other pets. Therefore, people could become badly infected if they live together with their beloved pets for the long time. Secondly, many individuals raise pets for wrong reasons such as status symbol or for profit, which could affect negatively household pets because owners themselves could abondon their pets whenever they feel unnecessary to feed them and leave them in the wild environment regardless of many terrible dangers their pets have to face such as traffic accidents with pets or the lack of food and clean water. In conclusion, raising domestic pets, which is the growing trend nowadays, has benefits and drawbacks for both animals and owners themselves.
It is true that the number of household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
has been increasing
dramatically
in recent years. While producing numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
, this trend
also
brings
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
potential drawbacks.

On the one hand, keeping domestic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "benefit"
benefits
both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
The term is non-standard and not widely accepted.
themself
. There is no point in denying that pet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals’
loyalty and characteristic have the healing power, which could relieve
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
and bring great happiness for pet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
,
especially
those who always caught up in their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
work and study.
Therefore
, adopting
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
is becoming
increasingly
prevalent in the hustle and bustle in the new era.
Besides
, raising
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
also
stand them in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
stead due to the fact that pet
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
like cats and dogs are less likely to survive on their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
in the natural environment, where they
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
encounter the difficulties and hazards without any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
from human beings.
Consequently
, if they
are forced
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in the wild environment, then they would
easily
suffer from diseases or even
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
die
unexpectedly
.

On the other hand
, apart from these above
Consider using an m-dash if you do not want to join two words.
–
mentioned
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
, adopting household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
also
place those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
at a disadvantage.
Firstly
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with no surprise that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
themselves could bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
viruses or bacterial diseases, which could harm their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
seriously
.
Possible spelling mistake found.
Toxoplasmosis
,
for example
, is the disease caused by parasite called
Possible spelling mistake found.
toxoplasma
Possible spelling mistake found.
gondii
, which has
been found
in warm-blood
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
like cats and other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
could become
badly
infected if they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
together with their beloved
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
for the long time.
Secondly
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
individuals raise
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
reasons such as status symbol or for profit, which could affect
negatively
household
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
themselves could
Possible spelling mistake found.
abondon
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
whenever they feel unnecessary to feed them and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
them in the wild environment regardless of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
terrible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
dangers
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
face such as traffic accidents with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
or the lack of food and clean water.

In conclusion
, raising domestic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
pets
, which is the growing trend nowadays, has
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
benefits
and drawbacks for both
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
owners
themselves.
15Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Learning a new language is becoming a member of the club – the community of speakers of that language.
Frank Smith

IELTS essay More and more people have pets in their homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of having pets? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts