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Some people think that the development of technology has made our life more complex, and the solution is to live a simpler life without technology. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that the development of technology has made our life more complex, and the solution is to live a simpler life without technology. v. 1
Despite the fact the matter of the evolution of technology has not caught the attention as frequently as other issues, it does not mean it is less vital. It is increasingly believed that our life has been more complex due to the development of technology, and living a simpler life is considered as a solution. As far as I am concerned, this opinion will bring about a negative impact on the society. It has long been recognized that the technology is the main contributor into modern societies. It is evident that the quality of life has been improved thanks to several inventions of technology such as smartphones, Internet, computers, and other things. For instance, smartphones furnish the connection of people between long distances, the Internet is an enormous source of data, which people can be provided a great amount of information. As a result, the living standard has been improved days by days. Apart from it, the growth of technology is a facilitator of the integration of the globalized world. There is no room for doubt there is a wide range of buildings have been constructed by advanced devices and computers. If the technology did not appear, humanity would meet the difficulties in building. Therefore, famous constructions like skyscrapers have not been established. More to the point, the development of technology is a profound contribution to the education. Admittedly, nowadays, lessons are taught on a host of presentations which are performed by projectors, the invention of modern technology. This leads to the fact teachers can be promoted better teaching methods. In addition, the amount of knowledge which is provided for students, can be extended. Hence, better ways of education are attributed to the technology. In the light of these facts, I nurture the idea the improvement of technology is imperative for the sustainable development of society. In spite of the fact it might make people’s life more complex, technology still plays a crucial role in modern communities.
Despite the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fact
the matter of the evolution of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
has not caught the attention as
frequently
as other issues, it does not mean it is less vital. It is
increasingly
believed that our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
has been more complex due to the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
, and living a simpler
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
is considered
as a solution. As far as I
am concerned
, this opinion will bring about a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
impact on the society.

It has long
been recognized
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is the main contributor into modern societies. It is evident that the quality of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
thanks to several inventions of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
such as smartphones, Internet, computers, and other things.
For instance
, smartphones furnish the connection of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
between long distances, the Internet is an enormous source of data, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
be provided
a great amount of information.
As a result
, the living standard has been
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improved
days by days.

Apart from it, the growth of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is a facilitator of the integration of the globalized world. There is no room for doubt there is a wide range of buildings have
been constructed
by advanced devices and computers. If the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
did not appear, humanity would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the difficulties in building.
Therefore
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
constructions like skyscrapers have not
been established
.

More to the point, the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is a profound contribution to the education.
Admittedly
, nowadays, lessons
are taught
on a host of presentations which
are performed
by projectors, the invention of modern
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
. This leads to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fact
teachers can
be promoted
better teaching methods.
In addition
, the amount of knowledge which
is provided
for students, can
be extended
.
Hence
, better ways of education
are attributed
to the technology.

In the light of these facts, I nurture the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
the improvement of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
is imperative for the sustainable development of society.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
In spite of
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fact
it might
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
life
more complex,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
still
plays a crucial role in modern communities.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that the development of technology has made our life more complex, and the solution is to live a simpler life without technology. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
327 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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