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In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negatives effects on society? v.2

In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negatives effects on society? v. 2
There has been a tendency in many countries over recent years for more people of all ages to choose to live alone. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and explain why this can have both advantages and disadvantages for society. One reason for this trend is economic. People are generally more affluent than in the past, and this means that they can afford to make the choice to live alone, something not always possible in the past. In addition to this, there are also cultural factors. There used to be more pressure to marry young and think about having a family. Now though, people desire self-fulfilment, and will marry later or divorce if their marriage is not happy. Also, the developments in communication technology such as social media mean that people can live alone but still feel connected to others. I would argue that this development has positive and negative impacts on society. A positive impact is that those individuals who are young and single have helped to revitalise cities around the world, as they are more likely to live in central locations and socialise, spend money and participate in public life than those living with others. However, a drawback is that some people living alone who experience problems may not have an outlet to talk about them. This lack of social support could lead to more mental health problems in the general population, which would need to be dealt with by public health care services. To conclude, economic and cultural factors, and changes in communication have resulted in more people living alone, and, although this has benefits to society, there are also negative impacts.
There has been a tendency in
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countries over recent years for more
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of all ages to choose to
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. This essay will discuss the reasons for this and
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explain
why this can have both advantages and disadvantages for society.

One reason for this trend is economic.
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are
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more affluent than in the past, and this means that they can afford to
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make
the choice to
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live
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, something not always possible in the past.
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to this, there are
also
cultural factors. There
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to be more pressure to marry young and
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about having a family.
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Now
though,
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people
desire
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self-fulfilment
, and will marry later or divorce if their marriage is not happy.
Also
, the developments in communication technology such as social media mean that
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can
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live
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but
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feel connected to others.

I would argue that this development has
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positive
and
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negative
impacts on society. A
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impact is that those individuals who are young and single have
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helped
to
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revitalise
cities around the world, as they are more likely to
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live
in central locations and
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socialise
, spend money and participate in public life than those living with others.
However
, a drawback is that
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some
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people
living
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alone
who experience problems may not have an outlet to talk about them. This lack of social support could lead to more mental health problems in the general population, which would need to
be dealt
with by public health care services.

To conclude
, economic and cultural factors, and
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changes
in communication have resulted in more
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people
living
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alone
, and, although this has benefits to society, there are
also
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negative
impacts.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In recent times, many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negatives effects on society? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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