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Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 4
As the global environmental problems have been aggravating over recent years, some analysts opine that exaggerating the price of fuel would be the appropriate solution. However, in my opinion, I would dissent to this notion because other solutions would be more effective regarding this crisis. To commence with, it is undeniable that fuel price impacts on the cost of other essential commodities. One good illustration of this is that when the fuel rate of the global market rises rapidly, the price of local products automatically follows an upward trend. Eventually, it will be an extreme burden for the impoverished as well as middle-class families. Secondly, other reasons such as industrial and chemical wastage, solid wastage, electronic wastage, and household wastage are also responsible for the global environmental disaster. The main reasons behind these issues are uncontrolled industrialization, imprudent human activities and so on. Therefore, the authority should more focus on these complications particularly rather than abating the fuel rate. However, it is evident that exacerbating the cost of fuel will be efficacious to mitigate the threat of global environmental dangers. because it will decline the number of car ownership. As a result, carbon dioxide gas or other dangerous gases that are responsible for poor air quality will be alleviated potentially. Nonetheless, this endeavor would be beneficial only for developing countries where the citizen from developed countries will be able to somehow manage to overcome this. In conclusion, expanding the cost of fuel will be a helpful initiative to solve the global environmental crisis only for particular cases but, the government should prioritize the real causes of global environmental problems more precisely.
As the
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global
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environmental
problems have been aggravating over recent years,
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some
analysts opine that exaggerating the price of
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fuel
would be the appropriate solution.
However
, in my opinion, I would dissent to this notion
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because
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other
solutions would be more effective regarding this crisis.

To commence with, it is undeniable that
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fuel
price impacts on the cost of
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other
essential commodities. One
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good
illustration of this is that when the
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fuel
rate of the
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global
market rises
rapidly
, the price of local products
automatically
follows an upward trend.
Eventually
, it will be an extreme burden for the impoverished
as well
as middle-
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class
families.

Secondly
,
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other
reasons such as industrial and chemical
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wastage
, solid
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wastage
, electronic
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wastage
, and household
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wastage
are
also
responsible for the
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global
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environmental
disaster. The main reasons behind these issues
are uncontrolled
industrialization, imprudent human activities and
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so
on.
Therefore
, the authority should more focus on these complications
particularly
rather
than abating the
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fuel
rate.

However
, it is evident that exacerbating the cost of
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fuel
will be efficacious to mitigate the threat of
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global
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environmental
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dangers
.
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because
it will decline the number of car ownership.
As a result
, carbon dioxide gas or
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other
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dangerous
gases that are responsible for poor air quality will
be alleviated
potentially
. Nonetheless, this endeavor would be beneficial
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only
for
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developing countries
where the citizen from
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developed countries
will be able to somehow manage to overcome this.

In conclusion
, expanding the cost of
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fuel
will be a helpful initiative to solve the
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global
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environmental
crisis
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only
for particular cases
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but
, the
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government
should prioritize the real causes of
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global
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environmental
problems more
precisely
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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