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Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. Do you agree or disagree? v.3

Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3
Environmental pollution has been a major concern in today’s society, and some people feel that governments should raise the price of fuel to resolve this issue. In my opinion, it may help to some extent; however, this is not the only solution to tackle this problem. To begin with, increasing the price of petrol can help reduce the environmental pollution to some degree. In other words, excessive use of cars releases carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which is detrimental to the environment. If the price of petrol is increased / hiked), individuals will start to use their cars less often and this in turn can decelerate the rate of air pollution. However, the increase in the cost of petrol will not stop the environmental pollution. Besides, the fuel price determines the market prices of other essential commodities, and increasing the price can affect poor and middle class families. On the other hand, governments can take other measures to mitigate these problems. A better solution is to invest in renewable energy sources such as wind, solar and tide rather than non-renewable resources like coal and petrol. For example, solar power in the United States has proven its efficiency in energy production. Second, by improving public transportation and reducing the cost of traveling, the government can encourage more people to use public transport; this practice can help clean the environment and reduce traffic. To conclude, I strongly believe that the hike in the petrol price is not the best solution to this problem. Improving the efficiency of public transport and investing in renewable energy sources are better alternatives that ought to be considered.
Environmental
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pollution
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today
’s society, and
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some
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people
feel that
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governments
should raise the
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price
of fuel to resolve this issue. In my opinion, it may
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help
to
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some
extent;
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only
solution to tackle this problem.

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begin
with, increasing the
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price
of
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petrol
can
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help
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reduce
the environmental
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pollution
to
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some
degree. In
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other
words, excessive
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use
of cars releases carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which is detrimental to the environment. If the
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price
of
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petrol
is increased
/ hiked
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, individuals will
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start
to
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use
their cars less
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often
and this in turn can decelerate the rate of air
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pollution
.
However
, the increase in the cost of
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petrol
will not
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stop
the environmental
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pollution
.
Besides
, the fuel
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price
determines the market
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prices
of
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other
essential commodities, and increasing the
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price
can affect poor and middle
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class
families.

On the
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other
hand,
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governments
can take
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other
measures to mitigate these problems. A better solution is to invest in renewable energy sources such as wind, solar and tide
rather
than non-renewable resources like coal and
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petrol
.
For example
, solar power in the United States has proven its efficiency in energy production. Second, by improving public transportation and reducing the cost of traveling, the
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government
can encourage more
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people
to
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use
public transport; this practice can
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help
clean the environment and
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reduce
traffic.

To conclude
, I
strongly
believe that the hike in the
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petrol
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price
is not the best solution to this problem. Improving the efficiency of public transport and investing in renewable energy sources are better alternatives that ought to
be considered
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to solve environmental problems is to increase the price of fuel for cars and other vehicles. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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