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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.4

Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways. v. 4
Assignment 1 Recently, there has been a debate on how to enhance road safety. While some people believe that the best method is by decreasing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, other people, including me, believe that there are other efficient methods to tackle this issues. The rationale for each view will be discussed. Some people are of the view that the best approach to boost road safety is by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles because this method will minimize the death rates in the society. Most individuals go overboard when driving and are uncontrollable and this can lead to accidents. In most cases, these victims are terribly injured or die in the process. A recent report, giving by the Federal Road Safety Corp in Nigeria, shows that 65% of the road accidents is as a result of over speeding. On the other hand, other people, of which category I belong to, believe that there are more effective methods to refine safety on the road. One of such ways is by ensuring the road users obey traffic rules. A policy should be implemented to make sure traffic rules are obeyed. Whoever defaults should penalized and made to pay a huge fine. That way, lives are more secure. Another way of revamping road safety is by certifying the drivers are well trained and have an authentic license to prove. Drivers should be trained thoroughly before been issued a license. A research carried out by John Donald, the owner of Top Notch Driving School in Germany, shows that 75% of people involved in automobile crashes do not have a license. In conclusion, although some people support that decreasing the maximum speed limits is the best way to improve road safety as it will reduce the death rate, I maintain that adhering to traffic laws and obtaining a driver's license are superior methods.
Assignment 1

Recently, there has been a debate on how to enhance
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road
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safety
. While
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some
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people
believe that the best
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method
is by decreasing the maximum speed limits on vehicles,
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other
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people
, including me, believe that there are
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other
efficient
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methods
to tackle this issues. The rationale for each view will
be discussed
.

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Some
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people
are of the view that the best approach to boost
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road
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safety
is by reducing the maximum limits on vehicles
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because
this
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method
will minimize the death rates in the society. Most individuals go overboard when driving and are uncontrollable and this can lead to accidents.
In most cases
, these victims are
terribly
injured or
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die
in the process. A recent report, giving by the Federal
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Road
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Safety
Corp in Nigeria,
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shows
that 65% of the
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road
accidents is
as a result
of over speeding.

On the
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other
hand,
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other
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people
, of which category I belong to, believe that there are more effective
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methods
to refine
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safety
on the
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road
. One of such ways is by ensuring the
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road
users obey traffic
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rules
. A policy should
be implemented
to
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make
sure traffic
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rules
are obeyed
. Whoever defaults should
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penalized
and made to pay a huge fine. That way,
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lives
are more secure. Another way of revamping
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road
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safety
is by certifying the drivers are
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well trained
and have an authentic license to prove. Drivers should
be trained
thoroughly
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before
been issued
a license.
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A research
carried out by John Donald, the owner of Top Notch Driving School in Germany,
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shows
that 75% of
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people
involved in automobile crashes do not have a license.

In conclusion
, although
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some
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people
support that decreasing the maximum speed limits is the best way to
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improve
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road
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safety
as it will
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reduce
the death rate, I maintain that adhering to traffic laws and obtaining a driver's license are superior
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methods
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles others think there are other better ways. v. 4

Essay
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5 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
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