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Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion. v.4

Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say. v. 4
According to time the old people want their children's to follow them as they guide the best, but if we think from the teenager's point of view they never want anyone to interfere in their live's but it may possibly that they accept their grandparents as a new challenge in their live's. We should never take our old age people lightly because they have experienced more as compare to us and they raided the world as much as they can and faced many more new challenges. As per my point of view teenagers must follow what their elders say's to them because they faced the challenges they deal up with the world and they are having much more knowledge of each and every field as we have. Many a times ancient therapy may take a fast growth or take quick action as what we are thinking of. If we see our surrounding their homeopathic medicines, Allopathy, Ayurvedic etc. In today's time, many doctors believe in Ayurvedic medicines because in ancient time there were no doctors there were only brahmins who provide the Ayurvedic medicines which are made up from leaves, Tulsi, through branches of trees etc. So, we should believe on our old Algiers and make them proud after taking decisions as they want. Some people believe that it is good for teenagers to challenge what old people say because they thought that today's generation never accept the challenges or the instructions which are being given by their parents' family because they thought that they are from different period and they never understand the young generation's thought and mentality. As per me we should never make challenges to our elders mentality or they're working style because they will never instruct us wrong. Our grandparents always want their children to grow and take the challenges very active and make them fulfilled. The challenges and the part of the competition and for the business deal these challenges never interrupt between our families because when the challenges take place between the families they will never develop themselves and never make their parents and children proud. Accepting the challenges of older age people is compulsory but for our benefit and for our growth and opportunity. Always see the challenges of the people positively never see it negatively. So as per my accepting the challenges of the elders are good and beneficial to us it never make harmful effect in our life.
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live's
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that they accept their grandparents as a new
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challenge
in their
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live's
. We should never take our
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old
age
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people
lightly
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because
they have experienced more
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compare to
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us and
they raided the world as much as they can and faced
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many
more new challenges.

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teenagers
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follow what their elders say's to them
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because
they faced the
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challenges
they deal up with the
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world and
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a
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times
ancient therapy may take a
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growth or take quick action as what we are thinking of. If we
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see
our surrounding their homeopathic medicines,
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Allopathy
, Ayurvedic etc. In
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today
's
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time
,
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many
doctors believe in Ayurvedic medicines
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because
in ancient
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time
there were no doctors there were
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only
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brahmins
who provide the Ayurvedic medicines which
are made
up from
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leaves
,
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Tulsi
, through branches of trees etc.
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, we should believe on our
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old
Algiers and
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make
them proud after taking decisions as they want.

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people
believe that it is
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good
for
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teenagers
to
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challenge
what
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old
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people
say
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they
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thought
that
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today
's generation never accept the
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challenges
or the instructions which are being
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given
by their parents' family
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because
they
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thought
that they are from
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period and
they never understand the young generation's
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thought
and mentality.

As per me we should never
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challenges
to our elders
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mentality or
they're working style
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because
they will never instruct us
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wrong
. Our grandparents always want their children to grow and take the
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challenges
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very
active and
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make
them fulfilled. The
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challenges
and the part of the competition and for the business deal these
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challenges
never interrupt between our families
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because
when the
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challenges
take place between the families they will never develop themselves and never
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make
their parents and children proud.

Accepting the
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challenges
of older age
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people
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is
compulsory
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but
for our benefit and for our growth and opportunity. Always
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see
the
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challenges
of the
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people
positively
never
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see
it
negatively
.

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as per my accepting the
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of the elders are
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good
and beneficial to us it never
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make
harmful effect in our life.
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31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that teenagers should follow what the old people say whereas some believe that it is good for teenage people to challenge what old people say. v. 4

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
407 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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