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International travel make people prejudiced rather that broad minded what are its causes and measures. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v.1

International travel make people prejudiced rather that broad minded what are its causes and measures. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1
Today, it is true that visitors coming to abroad are having prejudice mind set related to that particular country. You have thought of religions because visitors never ready to accept the different practice as they are habitual with their own myth. There are several reasons for the dissatisfaction. The biggest disappointment is their particular religious bigot. They always want themselves to be upgraded and don't want to learn with other's ethics. Fore. g. The bulk of travellers makes their judgement based on own knowledge and go against two local people. The other issue is that they are having different hobbies. They don't want to learn or accept the customs for the different nationality. As per me nationality has never made any difference between the visitors or to the person's because of we are being guided by the different locality, I should ready to learn and to know the art, practice, values and ethics of that nation as we are there to learn or to gain something new which we are not supposed to learn in our habit. The main causes are as bellow: 1. The wide variation between the Britishers and Indians. 2. The working style of the country. 3. Tourist is not accepting the habit of the local community. 4. Not follow the rules and regulation of that country. 5. Disrespect of local people. The preventive measures which we have to take are as follows: 1. Give guidance through campings, advertisement, newspapers. 2. Provide local education in the schools. 3. Provide some information to the tourist. As, the tourist is not following the customs and traditions of the local practice so it is more prejudiced as compare to broad minded.
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Today
, it is true that visitors coming to abroad are having prejudice mind set related to that particular country. You have
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thought
of religions
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because
visitors never ready to accept the
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different
practice as they are habitual with their
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own
myth. There are several reasons for the dissatisfaction.

The biggest disappointment is their particular religious bigot. They always want themselves to
be upgraded
and don't want to
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learn
with other's ethics.

Fore. g. The bulk of
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travellers
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makes
their judgement based on
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own
knowledge and go against two
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local
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people
. The other issue is that they are having
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different
hobbies. They don't want to
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learn
or accept the customs for the
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different
nationality.

As per me nationality has never made any difference between the visitors or to the person's
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because of we
are
being guided
by the
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different
locality, I should ready to
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learn
and to know the art, practice, values and ethics of that nation as we are there to
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learn
or to gain something new which we are not supposed to
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learn
in our habit.

The main causes are as bellow:

1. The wide variation between the Britishers and Indians.

2.
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The
working style of the country.

3. Tourist is not accepting the habit of the
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local
community.

4. Not follow the
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rules
and regulation of that country.

5. Disrespect of
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local
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people
.

The preventive measures which we
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have to
take are as follows:

1. Give guidance through
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campings
, advertisement, newspapers.

2. Provide
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local
education in the schools.

3. Provide
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some
information to the tourist.

As, the tourist is not following the customs and traditions of the
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local
practice
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so
it is more prejudiced as compare to
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broad minded
.
0Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
I am always sorry when any language is lost, because languages are the pedigrees of nations.
Samuel Johnson

IELTS essay International travel make people prejudiced rather that broad minded what are its causes and measures. What measures can be taken to solve this problem? v. 1

Essay
  American English
15 paragraphs
281 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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