Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they sould challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion. v.1
Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they sould challenge the old thoughts.  v. 1
It is a controversial issue as to whether adolescents ought to follow the convention of their ancestors, or, whether they had better raise questions on orthodox and other beliefs of older people. From my perspective, young generation excepts those thoughts of predecessors, which is essential in everyday life and rejects those sorts of beliefs that hamper them.
To begin with, from many generations, people nourish some facts and ideas, which are, invariably, helping till now, even though juveniles do not follow. However, if they abide by these rules, they would get a success in life. For example, in India, most of the parents have a good knowledge of education, which they learnt it from teachers at their school such as early rising, memorizing critical topic in the morning, maintaining a balance-diet, eating meals on time. These days, students are unbridled in following any of these regulations that Japanese maintain from the time immemorial. As a result, they lag behind not only in good health but also studying properly.
In contrast, there are some disadvantages to obey the tradition, and it should not be done by young people. In Hinduism, for instance, before 100 years ago, people used to sacrifice children before idols of goddesses. Thinking that goddesses might be happy, who could bestow wealth, fame and other happiness of life. Now, the present generation should raise their voice against this inhuman attitude, though it is prevailing some parts of the area in India. Another important factor is childhood marriages, which are ubiquitous from western countries to Asian countries. For that reason, teenagers should take a legal action about this. Thus, some conventions must restrict by the hand of youngsters.
In conclusion, although myriads of masses think that children should follow the tradition of older people, some believe that they should fight against old thoughts. In my opinion, the idea, which is positive, has to accept by teenagers, and the negative ideas must be challenged through them. 
It is a controversial issue  
as to whether
 adolescents ought to follow the convention of their ancestors, or, whether they had better raise questions on orthodox and other beliefs of older  
people
. From my perspective, young generation excepts those thoughts of predecessors, which is essential in everyday life and rejects those sorts of beliefs that hamper them.
To  
begin
 with, from  
many
 generations,  
people
 nourish  
some
 facts and  
ideas
, which are,  
invariably
, helping till  
now
,  
even though
 juveniles do not follow.  
However
, if they abide by these  
rules
, they would  
get
 a success in life.  
For example
, in India, most of the parents have a  
good
 knowledge of education, which they  
learnt
 it from teachers at their school such as early rising, memorizing critical topic in the morning, maintaining a balance-diet, eating meals on time. These days, students  
are unbridled
 in following any of these regulations that Japanese maintain from the time immemorial.  
As a result
, they lag behind not  
only
 in  
good
 health  
but
  also
 studying  
properly
. 
In contrast
, there are  
some
 disadvantages to obey the tradition, and it should not  
be done
 by young  
people
. In Hinduism,  
for instance
,  
before
 100 years ago,  
people
  used
 to sacrifice children  
before
 idols of goddesses. Thinking that goddesses might be happy, who could bestow wealth, fame and other happiness of life.  
Now
, the present generation should raise their voice against this inhuman attitude, though it is prevailing  
some
 parts of the area in India. Another  
important
 factor is childhood marriages, which are ubiquitous from western countries to Asian countries. For that reason,  
teenagers
 should take a legal action about this.  
Thus
,  
some
 conventions  
must
 restrict by the hand of youngsters. 
In conclusion
, although myriads of masses  
think
 that children should follow the tradition of older  
people
,  
some
 believe that they should fight against  
old
 thoughts. In my opinion, the  
idea
, which is  
positive
,  
has to
 accept by  
teenagers
, and the  
negative
  ideas
  must
  be challenged
 through them. 
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