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Some people think that news and media are affecting our life in a positive way while others disagree. What is your opinion? v.2

Some people think that news and media are affecting our life in a positive way while others disagree. What is your opinion? v. 2
Correspondents and news reporters are, invariably, influencing the life of the general people by applying positive methods, which show a positive sign, while some people would think that the influences come from news readers, are quite ineffective. In my opinion, whatever media telecasts on air, it benefits the public through changes in the community. To begin with, although severe topics are available on TV news, YouTube, and other social sites, people observe this data and endeavour to change the nation as a whole. For example, in Bangladesh, The Daily Star, a newspaper, has published some serious headlines such as the murder of Abrar, a student of an Engineering department in Dhaka, and the political crisis of the opposition party. As a result, parents and guardians are not only aware of university life in the capital city, but also commence on posting on different social networks that politics in university life should be banned. Similarly, the political upheaval spreads consciousness among people, which could help them in voting the right candidate in the election. In contrast, YouTubers, these days, make videos on critical thinking in politics. It is unjustifiable to say that the population gets harms watching that thoughtful criticism on political parties. This is because youngsters will be benefited whose aim is to become a good politician. In fact, it will be helpful to writers on political science, which could succour them in writing the modern outlook on politics. Moreover, sometimes, newsreaders report on consumer products, which might influence on customers who choose the right kind of product, since they are made aware of goods before buying. Thus, news, whether on a big branded product or political thinking, provides a good sign of people rather than bad-effects. In conclusion, human life is extremely influenced by the media and the daily news that has a positive advancement, even though some individuals disagree with this viewpoint. Overall, from my perspective, the broadcasted news, whether a positive or a negative, provides advantages in society by transforming it.
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reporters are,
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, influencing the
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life
of the general
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people
by applying
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positive
methods, which
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show
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positive
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sign
, while
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some
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people
would
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think
that the influences
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come
from
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news
readers, are quite ineffective. In my opinion, whatever media telecasts on air, it benefits the public through
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changes
in the community.

To
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begin
with, although severe topics are available on TV
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news
, YouTube, and other social sites,
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people
observe this data and
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endeavour
to
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change
the nation as a whole.
For example
, in Bangladesh, The Daily Star, a newspaper, has published
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some
serious headlines such as the murder of
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Abrar
, a student of an Engineering department in Dhaka, and the political crisis of the opposition party.
As a result
, parents and guardians are not
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only
aware of university
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life
in the capital city,
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but
also
commence on posting on
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different
social networks that politics in university
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life
should
be banned
.
Similarly
, the political upheaval spreads consciousness among
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people
, which could
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help
them in voting the right candidate in the election.

In contrast
, YouTubers, these days,
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make
videos on critical thinking in politics. It is unjustifiable to say that the population
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gets
harms watching that thoughtful criticism on political parties. This is
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because
youngsters will
be benefited
whose aim is to become a
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good
politician. In fact, it will be helpful to writers on political science, which could
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succour
them in writing the modern outlook on politics.
Moreover
,
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sometimes
, newsreaders report on consumer products, which might influence on customers who choose the right kind of product, since they
are made
aware of
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goods
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before
buying.
Thus
,
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news
, whether on a
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big
branded product or political thinking, provides a
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good
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sign
of
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people
rather
than
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bad
-effects.

In conclusion
, human
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life
is
extremely
influenced by the media and the daily
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news
that has a
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positive
advancement,
even though
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some
individuals disagree with this viewpoint.
Overall
, from my perspective, the broadcasted
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news
, whether a
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positive
or a
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negative
, provides advantages in society by transforming it.
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IELTS essay Some people think that news and media are affecting our life in a positive way while others disagree. What is your opinion? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
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Overall Band Score
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