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Some people believe that young people should follow older generation’s example. Others, however, disagree and believe that it’s good to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. Discuss both views and give your own opinion v.2

Some people believe that young people should follow older generation’s example. Others, however, disagree and believe that it’s good to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. 2
Unlike the past, when older people have much knowledge for all problems than young generations, now, in modern lifestyle young people do well than old age. As a result, in some fields youngsters do better than old people and visa versa. In this topic proponents believe that adults should follow older' s path, but critics argue that it is better to adopt new idea to deal with problems. In this essay I will shed some light on both sides of this debate. On one hand, it is believe that old generation have better knowledge and experience of any kind of problems. they have better knowledge of how to deal with problems. In modern days many people obey old people' s advices. They also take rewards of " old is gold" . Secondly, many medical science has also accept and follow traditional way of treating diseases. Some medical advises from our grandparents also useful to treat lots of problems. For instance, few days ago i had a toothache in middle night, and i did not have painkiller to treat that pain. that time my grandmother tell me to chew cloves. and after half hour i felt better without any prescriptions. furthermore we cannot ignore the reality that old people are better to solve many family problems in easy ways. they solve problems without any disputes. Hence, it is believe that adults have to follow old people' s advises and example in their life. On other hand, it is believe that, new generation have better knowledge about various technology. and they have experience of faster life. my opinion is taken into account because we live in faster life, where technology is developed day by day as well as science progress increasingly. However, sometimes we can not follow every rules of old people. In addition, Young generation do well better than old people in field of technology. and they does not believe in old beliefs. Foe example, in the past when old people believe in astrology to take important decisions like marriage, but now modern generation only believe in only in love and mutual understanding, Thus, in some cases youngsters do well than old people. In a nutshell, i believe that both the views have their own standards. old people are correct on their own way. and new generation also right in their personal opinion. In today' s life both generation' s experience and knowledge as well as guidance in every fields are necessary to cope with the problems.
Unlike the past, when older
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people
have much
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knowledge
for all
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problems
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now
, in modern lifestyle young
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people
do
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well
than
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old
age.
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, in
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some
fields youngsters do
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better
than
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old
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people
and visa versa. In this topic proponents
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believe
that adults should
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follow
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older&
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but
critics argue that it is
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better
to adopt new
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idea
to deal with
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problems
. In this essay I will shed
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some
light on both sides of this debate.

On one hand, it is
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believe
that
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old
generation have
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better
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knowledge
and experience of any kind of
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problems
.
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they
have
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better
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knowledge
of how to deal with
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problems
. In modern days
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many
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people
obey
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old
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people&
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also
take rewards of
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;
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old
is
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gold&quot
;
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.
Secondly
,
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many
medical science has
also
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accept
and
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follow
traditional way of treating diseases.
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Some
medical advises from our grandparents
also
useful to treat lots of
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problems
.
For instance
, few days ago
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i
had a toothache in middle night, and
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i
did not have painkiller to treat that pain.
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that
time my grandmother
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tell
me to chew cloves.
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and
after half hour
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i
felt
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better
without any prescriptions.
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furthermore
we cannot
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ignore
the reality that
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old
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people
are
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better
to solve
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many
family
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problems
in easy ways.
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they
solve
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problems
without any disputes.
Hence
, it is
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believe
that adults
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have to
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follow
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old
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people&
#039; s advises and example in their life.

On other hand, it is
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believe
that, new generation have
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better
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knowledge
about various technology.
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and
they have experience of faster life.
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my
opinion
is taken
into account
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because
we
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live
in faster life, where technology
is developed
day by day as
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well
as science progress
increasingly
.
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,
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sometimes
we can not
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follow
every
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rules
of
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old
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people
.
In addition
, Young generation do
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well
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better
than
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old
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people
in field of technology.
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and
they
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does
not
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believe
in
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old
beliefs. Foe example, in the past when
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old
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people
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believe
in astrology to take
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important
decisions like marriage,
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but
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now
modern generation
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only
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believe
in
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only
in
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love
and mutual understanding,
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some
cases youngsters do
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well
than
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old
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people
.

In a nutshell,
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i
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believe
that both the views have their
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own
standards.
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old
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people
are correct on their
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own
way.
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and
new generation
also
right in their personal opinion. In
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today&
#039; s life both
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generation&
#039; s experience and
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knowledge
as
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well
as guidance in every
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fields
are necessary to cope with the
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problems
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
62Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
31Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that young people should follow older generation’s example. Others, however, disagree and believe that it’s good to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
416 words
6.0
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