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Some people think that team sports prepare children for work life but others think individual sports are better. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.5

Some people think that team sports prepare children for work life but others think individual sports are better. v. 5
JUVENILES ARE DELICATE AND THUS WE NEED TO TAKE CARE OF THEIR BREEDING PROCESS SERIOUSLY. THERE ARE CERTAIN FOLKS WHO ARGUE THAT THE GROUP SPORTS ARE THE BEST FOR JUVENILES. WHEREAS, REST OF THE FOLKS HAVE AN OBJECTION ON THIS AND SAY THAT PLYAING SOLO SPORTS MAKE AN OFFSPRING A BETTER PERSON. FIRSTLY, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE SEVERAL REASON OF WHY CERTAIN PEOPLE SUPPORT THE GROUP SPORTS AND WHY OTHERS HAVE AN OBJECTION TO IT. LASTLY, STATE THE OPINION INN THW FAVOR OF BOTH VIEWS. ON THE ONE SIDE, THE MAJOR REASON IS TO SUPPORT THE GROUP ACTIVITIES FOR JUVENILES IS THAT IT WILL MAKE THEM LEARN HOW TO COMPROMISE AND SUPPORT EACHOTHERS IN THE DIFFICULT SITUATION. AS A RESULT, THEY WOULD GET A HUGE SUCCESS IN THEIR PROFESSIONAL LIFE AS GOOD EMPLOYEE. BECAUSE, THE EXCCELLENCY IN THE TEAM WORK IS THE BEST QUALITY OF THE BEST WORKER. FOR EXAMPLE, ACCORDING TO THE INDIAN CHILD CARE DEPARTMENT REPORT, 70% OF THE INDIAN YOUTH ARE PROVVED TO BE GOOD WORKER CONSEQUNETLY, THEY HAVE THE EXPERIENCE OF WORKING WELL IN TEAM. ON THE OTHER HAND, INDIVIDUAL SPROTS TEACH OFFSPRING HOW TO BE AN INDEPENDENT AND A STRONG PERSON. WHEN THEY PLAY A SOLO GAME THEIR MIND IS MORE ACTIVATE IN COMPARED TO GROUP WORK. THIS WILL MAKE HIM TO USE HIS OWN CRITICAL THINKING POWER TAKE THE RIGHT DECISION AND AS IT IS HIS SOLITARY HARD WORK, HE WOULSD BE HAPPY AND INSPIRED TO DO TRY VARIOUS ADVENTURES FURTHER IN LIFE. FOR INSTANCE, THE NEUROLOGY DEPARTMENT OF THE UK STUDY SHOWN THAT THE ADOLESCENSE WHO PLAYS A SINGLE GAME, HAVE THE 80% INTELLEGENCE THAN WHO PLAY TEAM GAME. FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, I BELIEVE THAT WHATEVER THE SPORTS ARE. IT WOULD BE ADVANTAGEOUS TO PLAY AS BOTH TEACH AN ESSENTIAL TIPS TO AN OFFSPRING OF HOW TO SURVIVE IN THIS FAST PACE WORLD AS SUCCESFULL PERSON. IN CONCLUSION, GROUP AND SOLO GAMES INDEED PROVIDE A KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE OF A PLETHORA OF THING TO THE KIDS THAT THEY COULD USE THEM IN THEIR FIRTHER LIFE TO GET THE VICTORY. HOWEVER, THIS WOULD ONLY BE POSSIBLE WITH THE SUPPORT OF PARENTS AND THEOR MENTOR WHO ARE THE MOST VALUABLE PEOPLE IN KIDS LIVELIHOOD.
JUVENILES ARE DELICATE AND
THUS
WE NEED TO TAKE CARE OF THEIR BREEDING PROCESS
SERIOUSLY
. THERE ARE CERTAIN FOLKS
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WHO
ARGUE THAT THE
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GROUP
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SPORTS
ARE THE BEST FOR JUVENILES. WHEREAS, REST OF THE FOLKS HAVE AN OBJECTION ON THIS AND SAY THAT
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PLYAING
SOLO
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SPORTS
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MAKE
AN OFFSPRING A BETTER PERSON.
FIRSTLY
, THIS ESSAY WILL DISCUSS THE SEVERAL REASON OF WHY CERTAIN
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PEOPLE
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SUPPORT
THE
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GROUP
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SPORTS
AND WHY OTHERS HAVE AN OBJECTION TO IT.
LASTLY
, STATE THE OPINION INN
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THW
FAVOR OF BOTH VIEWS.

ON THE ONE SIDE, THE MAJOR REASON IS TO
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SUPPORT
THE
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GROUP
ACTIVITIES FOR JUVENILES IS THAT IT WILL
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MAKE
THEM LEARN HOW TO COMPROMISE AND
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SUPPORT
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EACHOTHERS
IN THE DIFFICULT SITUATION.
AS A RESULT
, THEY WOULD
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GET
A HUGE SUCCESS IN THEIR PROFESSIONAL LIFE AS
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GOOD
EMPLOYEE.
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BECAUSE
, THE
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EXCCELLENCY
IN THE TEAM WORK IS THE BEST QUALITY OF THE BEST WORKER.
FOR EXAMPLE
, ACCORDING TO THE INDIAN CHILD CARE DEPARTMENT REPORT, 70% OF THE INDIAN YOUTH ARE
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PROVVED
TO BE
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GOOD
WORKER
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CONSEQUNETLY
, THEY HAVE THE EXPERIENCE OF WORKING WELL IN TEAM.

ON THE OTHER HAND
, INDIVIDUAL
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SPROTS
TEACH OFFSPRING HOW TO BE AN INDEPENDENT AND A STRONG PERSON. WHEN THEY
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PLAY
A SOLO GAME THEIR MIND IS MORE ACTIVATE IN COMPARED TO
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GROUP
WORK. THIS WILL
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MAKE
HIM TO
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USE
HIS
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OWN
CRITICAL THINKING POWER TAKE THE RIGHT DECISION AND AS IT IS HIS SOLITARY
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HARD
WORK, HE
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WOULSD
BE HAPPY AND INSPIRED TO DO TRY VARIOUS ADVENTURES
FURTHER
IN LIFE.
FOR INSTANCE
, THE NEUROLOGY DEPARTMENT OF THE UK STUDY SHOWN THAT THE
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ADOLESCENSE
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WHO
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PLAYS
A SINGLE GAME, HAVE THE 80%
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INTELLEGENCE
THAN
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WHO
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PLAY
TEAM GAME.

FROM MY POINT OF VIEW, I BELIEVE THAT WHATEVER THE
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SPORTS
ARE. IT WOULD BE ADVANTAGEOUS TO
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PLAY
AS BOTH TEACH AN ESSENTIAL TIPS TO AN OFFSPRING OF HOW TO SURVIVE IN THIS
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FAST
PACE WORLD AS
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SUCCESFULL
PERSON.

IN CONCLUSION
,
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GROUP
AND SOLO GAMES
INDEED
PROVIDE A KNOWLEDGE AND EXPERIENCE OF A PLETHORA OF THING TO THE KIDS THAT THEY COULD
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USE
THEM IN THEIR
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FIRTHER
LIFE TO
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GET
THE VICTORY.
HOWEVER
, THIS WOULD
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ONLY
BE POSSIBLE WITH THE
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SUPPORT
OF PARENTS AND
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THEOR
MENTOR
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WHO
ARE THE MOST VALUABLE
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PEOPLE
IN KIDS LIVELIHOOD.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that team sports prepare children for work life but others think individual sports are better. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
372 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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