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As population growth around the regionorestrvation of natural areas or is their destruction an inevitable consequence of population growth Support your view v.1

As population growth around the regionorestrvation of natural areas or is their destruction an inevitable consequence of population growth Support your view v. 1
It is true that outdoor is no longer popular for children to play. Several children who spend their time on indoor activities tend to play with their gadgets, as well as being a part of nature. In contrast, I strongly believe they should learn about nature through outdoor activities. Analysing the role of nature in children to do physical activities outdoors, also how nature teaches the children to appreciate and understand it will be explained below. Firstly, physically active play can make unique contributions to children's development which cannot be obtained from more structured forms of physical activity. Encouraging active play in children's leisure time has the potential to increase physical activity levels while promoting optimal child development. According to current research, children who spend most days in nature look healthier than they who sit a long day in the house. Moreover, physical activity totally makes them to rarely sick, because they move their body frequently, such as running, hiking, walking, etc. Secondly, nature is considered a home for people, plants and animals. Furthermore, knowing and respect nature is the responsibility of any person. As a matter of fact, the more people learn about nature, the more people appreciate it. Thus, educate the children about nature will be crucial for the parents’ role. The lesson can consist of exploring the nature area and explain to them about the animals or plants. I personally convinced this will work for children to appreciate nature, for example, they will love the animals and will not hurt them. Taking everything into consideration, I am extremely certain that fill the knowledge about nature with children it is vital for the children themselves also about the future of the world. It is recommended that young people are urged to spare more time in nature to increase their sense and love towards it.
It is true that outdoor is no longer popular for
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children
to
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play
. Several
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children
who spend their time on indoor
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activities
tend to
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play
with their gadgets,
as well
as being a part of
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nature
.
In contrast
, I
strongly
believe they should learn about
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nature
through outdoor
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activities
.
Possible spelling mistake. 'Analysing' is British English.
Analysing
the role of
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nature
in
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children
to do
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physical
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activities
outdoors,
also
how
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nature
teaches the
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children
to appreciate and understand it will be
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explained
below.

Firstly
,
physically
active
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play
can
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make
unique contributions to children's development which cannot
be obtained
from more structured forms of
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physical
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activity
. Encouraging active
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play
in children's leisure time has the potential to increase
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physical
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activity
levels while promoting optimal child development. According to
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current
research,
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children
who spend most days in
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nature
look healthier than they who sit a long day in the
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house
.
Moreover
,
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physical
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activity
totally
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makes
them to rarely sick,
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because
they
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move
their body
frequently
, such as running, hiking, walking, etc.

Secondly
,
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nature
is considered
a home for
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people
, plants and animals.
Furthermore
, knowing and respect
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nature
is the responsibility of any person. As a matter of fact, the more
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people
learn about
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nature
, the more
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people
appreciate it.
Thus
, educate the
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children
about
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nature
will be crucial for the parents’ role. The lesson can consist of exploring the
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nature
area and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
to them about the animals or plants. I
personally
convinced this will work for
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children
to appreciate
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nature
,
for example
, they will
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love
the animals and will not hurt them.

Taking everything into consideration, I am
extremely
certain that fill the knowledge about
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nature
with
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children
it is vital for the
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children
themselves
also
about the future of the world. It
is recommended
that young
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people
are urged
to spare more time in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nature
to increase their sense and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
towards it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay As population growth around the regionorestrvation of natural areas or is their destruction an inevitable consequence of population growth Support your view v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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