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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion? v.6

Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion? v. 6
Nowadays intelligent people are respected around the world. Although a few public considered that success is the best measure, others deny and believe that there are a few other ways to measured talents. In my opinion, I personally think that success is the significance policy for intelligence because success give the confidence as well as push the people in a new happier life as well. Firstly, people got the confidence from being successful. In other words, success always appropriate the human for doing well every time and people always try their best in every work of life. For example, while my brother got GPA FIVE in Secondary Certificate Examination, he again started to putting his hundred percent effort, as a result, he earn GPA FIVE again in the Higher Secondary Examination. Besides, success always give the confidence to people for doing well all time. Secondly, success made happier life of people. In other words, society always respect the successful people in the society as well as in the field of work, for instance, successful people got the best job opportunities in all over the world, because of only the success of people. As a result, they can build their future happier. Moreover, a happier future is important for the family of successful people as well. In conclusion, succeeding in life is beneficial in various ways. However, I think that being successful is the best way for intelligence. Because it always bring the confidence as well as manufactured happier upcoming days also.
Nowadays intelligent
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people
are respected
around the world. Although a few public considered that
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success
is the
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best
measure, others deny and believe that there are a few
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other
ways to measured talents. In my opinion, I
personally
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think
that
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success
is the significance policy for intelligence
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because
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success
give the
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confidence
as
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well
as push the
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people
in a new
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happier
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life
as well
.

Firstly
,
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people
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got
the
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confidence
from being
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successful
. In
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other
words,
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success
always appropriate the human for doing
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well
every time and
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people
always try their
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best
in every work of
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life
.
For example
, while my brother
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got
GPA FIVE in Secondary Certificate Examination, he again
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started
to putting his hundred percent effort,
as a result
, he
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earn
GPA FIVE again in the Higher Secondary Examination.
Besides
,
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success
always give the
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confidence
to
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people
for doing
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well
all time.

Secondly
,
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success
made
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happier
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life
of
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people
. In
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other
words, society always respect the
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successful
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people
in the society as
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well
as in the field of work,
for instance
,
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successful
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people
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got
the
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best
job opportunities in all over the world,
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because
of
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only
the
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success
of
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people
.
As a result
, they can build their future
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happier
.
Moreover
, a
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happier
future is
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important
for the family of
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successful
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people
as well
.

In conclusion
, succeeding in
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life
is beneficial in various ways.
However
, I
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think
that being
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successful
is the
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best
way for intelligence.
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Because
it always
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bring
the
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confidence
as
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well
as manufactured
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happier
upcoming days
also
.
24Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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