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Some people think that success in education depends on the teacher while others believe its the student s attitude that matters Discuss both views and give your opinion write no less than 250 words v.1

Some people think that success in education depends on the teacher while others believe its the student s attitude that matters 1
Never have predicaments been so rife that they are nowadays. It has been argued by some people, stating that a relevant method of coping with bad conditions such as monetary deficiency or unsatisfactory job is to swallow the fact, yet, others does stress out the importance of ameliorating these forms of situations. Along with my own view, the analysis of both sides will be presented in this essay below. To commence with, the life people are experiencing is replete with ups and downs. As a matter of fact, provided that one attempts to deal with all of them, he can find himself in dire straits due to the overload of stress encountered in the situation. Ergo, one should rather welcome the difficulty instead of combatting it and resulting in depression. However, owing to some reasons, trying to eliminate bad situations is also reasonable. To illustrate, if an effort of improving the situation is abandoned by a person, he will be accustomed to giving up in later phases of life. It makes it clear that he can be desensitized to the pitfalls he may face and proceed in a confident manner. So, a person can succeed in every sphere if he eradicates the problem. In conclusion, even though improving a bad situation is arduous, it may lead to self-confidence in the future. Therefore, I believe that the latter view is far more reliable. It is recommended that if people take every feasible effort against bad situations, they will be able to embrace a brighter future.
Never have predicaments been
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rife that they are nowadays. It has
been argued
by
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some
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people
, stating that a relevant method of coping with
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bad
conditions such as monetary deficiency or unsatisfactory job is to swallow the fact,
yet
, others does
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stress
out the importance of ameliorating these forms of
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situations
. Along with my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
view, the analysis of both sides will
be presented
in this essay below.

To commence with, the life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are experiencing is replete with ups and downs. As a matter of fact, provided that one attempts to deal with all of them, he can find himself in dire straits due to the overload of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
encountered in the
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situation
. Ergo, one should
rather
welcome the difficulty
instead
of
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combatting
it and resulting in depression.

However
, owing to
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some
reasons, trying to eliminate
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bad
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situations
is
also
reasonable. To illustrate, if an effort of improving the
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situation
is abandoned
by a person, he will
be accustomed
to giving up in later phases of life. It
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makes
it
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clear
that he can
be desensitized
to the pitfalls he may face and proceed
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in a confident manner
.
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So
, a person can succeed in every sphere if he eradicates the problem.

In conclusion
,
even though
improving a
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bad
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situation
is arduous, it may lead to self-confidence in the future.
Therefore
, I believe that the latter view is far more reliable. It
is recommended
that if
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people
take every feasible effort against
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bad
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situations
, they will be able to embrace a brighter future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that success in education depends on the teacher while others believe its the student s attitude that matters 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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