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Nowadays culture is different is some ways compare to the past. Do you think the culture development has a positive or negative trend. v.1

Nowadays culture is different is some ways compare to the past. Do you think the culture development has a positive or negative trend. v. 1
Bigger organizations are growing very fast as compared to older times. It is widely suggested that huge International companies are beneficial to countries with developing economies, whereas others believe that companies having a negative effect also. This essay will discuss both views and shows how organizations help more than their negative impact. A research body suggests that global companies have a positive effect on the economy of countries. International investment can help to offer job opportunities, which might lead to an increase in wages. To exemplify, the national newspaper of the country released in a magazine that workers of multinational companies earn 10% more than the staff of local companies. In short, the chain of companies can come with numerous advantages not only to the natives, but also to impact positively on the country's economy. Nonetheless, there are some negative sides to companies that need to be considered. The main point in that is the global organization can hire people from local companies. This can lead to a direct loss to the local companies. For instance, companies like KFC and Coca-Cola, having almost chains across the world. This kind of company offers the best benefits and opportunities to develop a career. In addition to this, these chain companies having more potential to take damage as compared to local organizations. In my opinion, global corporations helping countries to develop more in terms of the economy and other factors. Whereas, there is a very less negative impact, which is indirectly coming with an overall profit. In conclusion, the actions of multinational companies widely beneficial through county economies positively. While having very small disallowing factors.
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very
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fast
as compared to older times. It is
widely
suggested that huge International
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companies
are beneficial to
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countries
with developing
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economies
, whereas others believe that
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companies
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having
a
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negative
effect
also
. This essay will discuss both views and
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shows
how organizations
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help
more than their
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negative
impact.

A research body suggests that global
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companies
have a
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positive
effect on the
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economy
of
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countries
. International investment can
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help
to offer job opportunities, which might lead to an increase in wages. To exemplify, the national newspaper of the
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country
released in a magazine that workers of multinational
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companies
earn 10% more than the staff of
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local
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companies
. In short, the chain of
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companies
can
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come
with numerous advantages not
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only
to the natives,
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but
also
to impact
positively
on the country's economy.

Nonetheless, there are
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some
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negative
sides to
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companies
that need to
be considered
. The main point in
that is
the global organization can hire
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people
from
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local
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companies
. This can lead to a direct loss to the
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local
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companies
.
For instance
,
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companies
like KFC and Coca-Cola,
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having
almost chains across the world. This kind of
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company
offers the best benefits and opportunities to develop a career.
In addition
to this, these chain
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companies
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having
more potential to take damage as compared to
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local
organizations.

In my opinion, global corporations helping
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countries
to develop more in terms of the
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economy
and other factors. Whereas, there is a
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very
less
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negative
impact, which is
indirectly
coming with an
overall
profit.

In conclusion
, the actions of multinational
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companies
widely
beneficial through county
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economies
positively
.
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While
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very
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small
disallowing factors.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays culture is different is some ways compare to the past. Do you think the culture development has a positive or negative trend. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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