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Some people believe that teachers have an important role to play in the educational success, while others think it is the students' attitude that matters. Discuss both views and share your opinion. Write at least 250 words. v.1

Some people believe that teachers have an important role to play in the educational success, while others think it is the students' attitude that matters. v. 1
In general, teachers are spending more time with the students than their parents. Some people believe that faculties have a vital role to play for academic success, whereas others think that the student's attitude makes a difference in respect to the outcome. This essay will discuss both points of view. On the one hand, the teachers are the one who guides their students in an appropriate way to succeed in life. They were not only has a responsibility to teach subjects, but also to give the knowledge of life's lessons. For instance, men or women can achieve their success only when they have guided properly and that can be done only with the help of the faculty. So, the educator has a significant role to create a student with all good moral values. Furthermore, the teachers should put more effort to bring the tutees to learn their subjects and make them feel easy to study. This way makes the student graduate and structures their future with knowledge. On the other hand, the student's behaviour plays a vital role to acquire knowledge from anybody. Whenever the tutee is not accepting a command from the faculty, it is represented that this person is getting away from the right way. Moreover, if a person gets a degree, they cannot sustain in a workplace with this attitude. The students should understand that the elder words come from their experience, so they have to try the footpaths of them to get succeed in life without any obstacles. In conclusion, although the student's education life depends upon their attitude, I would argue that the teachers should need responsibilities to get the students in a right way with the repeated effort to make him/her a better person in the society.
In general
,
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teachers
are spending more time with the
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students
than their parents.
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Some
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people
believe that faculties have a vital role to play for academic success, whereas others
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think
that the student's attitude
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makes
a difference in respect to the outcome. This essay will discuss both points of view.

On the one hand, the
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teachers
are the one who guides their
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students
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in an appropriate way
to succeed in life. They were not
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only
has a responsibility to teach subjects,
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but
also
to give the knowledge of life's lessons.
For instance
,
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men
or women can achieve their success
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only
when they have guided
properly
and that can
be done
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only
with the
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help
of the faculty.
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So
, the educator has a significant role to create a
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student
with all
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good
moral values.
Furthermore
, the
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teachers
should put more effort to bring the
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tutees
to learn their subjects and
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make
them feel easy to study. This way
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makes
the
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student
graduate and structures their future with knowledge.

On the other hand
, the student's
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behaviour
plays a vital role to acquire knowledge from anybody. Whenever the
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tutee
is not accepting a command from the faculty, it
is represented
that this person is getting away from the right way.
Moreover
, if a person
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gets
a degree, they cannot sustain in a workplace with this attitude. The
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students
should understand that the elder words
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come
from their experience,
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so
they
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have to
try the footpaths of them to
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get
succeed in life without any obstacles.

In conclusion
, although the student's education life depends upon their attitude, I would argue that the
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teachers
should need responsibilities to
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get
the
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students
Consider replacing "in a right way" with the adverb for "right"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a right way
with the repeated effort to
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make
him/her a better person in the society.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people believe that teachers have an important role to play in the educational success, while others think it is the students' attitude that matters. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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