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Some people think that students who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded. Others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvement. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people think that students who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded. Others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvement. v. 1
Environment is a gift of god to the living beings. Developing nations are also living on the same planet on which the developed nations are living. So it is really does not matter at all that, who is having higher responsibility for this. Let's discuss in the essay. Firstly, it is the responsibility for all of us from all the countries, to take care of this amazing bond with the nature. Because, it is always difficult to take breathe in the polluted environment for all living beings and even for the plants to grow. According to me, cities in the developed countries are having some different techniques to cope up with the climatic changes. For instance, the climate like, summer, winter and frost, all are having the precautionary measures for that including both the nations. If any of the country will unable to adapt according to the climatic changes, then it will be difficult to survival for that particular one. Secondly, in the developing countries, the government and the local peoples having responsibility to take care of their nation. As we all know the better climate is always responsible for the better agriculture and in most of the countries for example India, most of the employment is dependent on the agriculture or I can say they are earning their bread and butter by working as a farmer. So government managing to maintain dams and canals for the climate change. To conclude, climatic condition changes every 4 months in the country like India, so there should be the preventive measures to cope up with these changes. On the other hand, in the developed countries, the climate is also varies accordingly and they also have to maintain their living according to that.
Environment is a gift of god to the
living
beings. Developing
nations
are
also
living
on the same planet on which the developed
nations
are
living
.
So
it is
really
does not matter at all that, who is
having
higher responsibility for this.
Let
's discuss in the essay.

Firstly
, it is the responsibility for all of us from all the
countries
, to take care of this amazing bond with the nature.
Because
, it is always difficult to take breathe in the polluted environment for all
living
beings and even for the plants to grow.
According to me
, cities in the developed
countries
are
having
some
different
techniques to cope up with the climatic
changes
.
For instance
, the
climate
like, summer, winter and frost, all are
having
the precautionary measures for that including both the
nations
. If any of the
country
will unable
to adapt according to the climatic
changes
, then it will be difficult to survival for that particular one.

Secondly
, in the developing
countries
, the
government
and the local peoples
having
responsibility to take care of their
nation
. As we all know the better
climate
is always responsible for the better agriculture and in most of the
countries
for example
India, most of the employment is dependent on the agriculture or I can say they are earning their bread and butter by working as a farmer.
So
government
managing to maintain dams and canals for the
climate
change
.

To conclude
, climatic condition
changes
every 4 months in the
country
like India,
so
there should be the preventive measures to cope up with these
changes
.
On the other hand
, in the developed
countries
, the
climate
is
also
varies
accordingly and
they
also
have to
maintain their
living
according to that.
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IELTS essay Some people think that students who achieve the best academic results should be rewarded. Others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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