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You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter• explain why you want to leave your current job• what kind of job you are looking for• ask for some help or advice v.1

You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter• explain why you want to leave your current job• what kind of job you are looking for• ask for some help or advice v. 1
The graduates of the best university are assumed by many people as a guarantee to obtain a decent work. Personally, I entirely accept this notion and I will explain the reasons in the essay. Firstly, degrees in popular universities will interest most companies since they have better accreditation than others. For example, a degree in economics from Indonesia University in Indonesia will be easily hired by companies in Indonesia as its graduates’ quality proved in the majority of offices. It is often said that the tertiary education have equipped all their students with theories or practical skills that are required by factories or other organisations. Secondly, Some of the high accreditation universities cooperate with some industries to create or provide human resources relevant to the prerequisites of the organisations, For Instance, practical abilities to use the machines. Furthermore, this cooperation bases of the working standards in the workplace, so that their qualification relates to the job and even career prospect is also considered. Admittedly, I do appreciate that not all people who have graduated from higher education can be received in their highly desirable occupation, to illustrate, music industries need a test or a proof of how good at their field is. Moreover, some employments necessitate practical and technical skills such as football, which colleges do not guarantee their students will gain a decent job. Overall, I believe that The certificate of the best college ease people to apply for, get a desirable profession because of their relation or cooperation and accreditation.
The graduates of the best
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university
are assumed
by
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many
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people
as a guarantee to obtain a decent work.
Personally
, I
entirely
accept this notion and I will
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explain
the reasons in the essay.

Firstly
, degrees in popular
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universities
will interest most
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companies
since they have better accreditation than others.
For example
, a degree in economics from Indonesia
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University
in Indonesia will be
easily
hired by
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companies
in Indonesia as its graduates’ quality proved in the majority of offices. It is
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often
said that the tertiary education have equipped all their students with theories or practical
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skills
that
are required
by factories or other
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organisations
.
Secondly
,
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Some of the
high accreditation
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universities
cooperate with
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some
industries to create or provide human resources relevant to the prerequisites of the
Possible spelling mistake. 'organisations' is British English.
organisations
,
For Instance
, practical abilities to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the machines.
Furthermore
, this cooperation bases of the working standards in the workplace,
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so
that their qualification relates to the job and even career prospect is
also
considered.

Admittedly
, I do appreciate that not all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who have graduated from higher education can
be received
in their
highly
desirable occupation, to illustrate, music industries need a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
test
or a proof of how
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at their field is.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
employments necessitate practical and technical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
such as football, which colleges do not guarantee their students will gain a decent job.

Overall
, I believe that The certificate of the best college
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ease
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to apply for,
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get
a desirable profession
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because
of their relation or cooperation and accreditation.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay You have decided to leave your current job and look for a new one. Write a letter to a friend. In your letter• explain why you want to leave your current job• what kind of job you are looking for• ask for some help or advice v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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