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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v.15

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 15
At recent years, there is an ongoing debate whether giving dire punishment to driving offences are the best solution to overcome severe accidents in roads or not. While some support this idea, many others believe that governments should provide improvements in road safety. This essay will try to discuss both views with several considerations given underneath. People are not prompted to engage safety driving because there are no regulations relating to drivers to be more careful on the road. It can be found in developing countries where the traffic is not well arranged and as a result, the numbers of terrible accidents remain dominant. Dissimilar with it, developed countries pay more attentions in this case by restricting the use of vehicles without licence limiting the top speed in certain busy areas such as boulevards and main roads, and imposing fine for all the offence forms in high rate, and as a result, these countries can overcome traffic accidents. However, governments with all efforts must improve the infrastructure of safety riding. Traffic signs should be renewed, the facilities in the road are supposed to be changed, etc. so the drivers can recognise the driving surroundings vividly. Furthermore, technologies are also urgent to deal with daunting events in driving environment. It is good news that outrageously inventions have been created and applied but still attempts in technology findings are required. In conclusion, while there are regulations to be defined, governments together with scientists, engineers, and car businessmen have to maximise in providing safety riding facilities to gain maximum result on this issue.
At recent years, there is an ongoing debate whether giving dire punishment to
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driving
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offences
are the best solution to overcome severe accidents in
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roads
or not. While
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some
support this
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idea
,
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many
others believe that
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governments
should provide improvements in
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road
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safety
. This essay will try to discuss both views with several considerations
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given
underneath.

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People
are not prompted to engage
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safety
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driving
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because
there are no regulations relating to drivers to be more careful on the
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road
. It can
be found
in
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developing countries
where the traffic is not well arranged and
as a result
, the numbers of terrible accidents remain dominant. Dissimilar with it,
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developed countries
pay more attentions
in this case
by restricting the
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use
of vehicles without
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licence
limiting the top speed in certain busy areas such as boulevards and main
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roads
, and imposing fine for all the
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offence
forms in high rate, and
as a result
, these countries can overcome traffic accidents.

However
,
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governments
with all efforts
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must
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improve
the infrastructure of
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safety
riding. Traffic signs should
be renewed
, the facilities in the
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road
are supposed
to be
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changed
, etc.
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so
the drivers can
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recognise
the
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driving
surroundings
vividly
.
Furthermore
, technologies are
also
urgent to deal with daunting
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events
in
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driving
environment. It is
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good
news that
outrageously
inventions have
been created
and applied
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but
still
attempts in technology findings
are required
.

In conclusion
, while there are regulations to
be defined
,
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governments
together with scientists, engineers, and car businessmen
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have to
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maximise
in providing
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safety
riding facilities to gain maximum result on this issue.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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