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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.5

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 5
The road casualty has become a major issue in this busy world. Every day the news of hazard can be seen is social media. While some people believe that government should abide strict rules for the drivers who break the rules, but other people opine that there are still other ways to minimize such incident. However i agree with the both statements. This essay will explain the reasons below. To begin with, it is inarguable that people are less responsible in recent days. If they have to go to work they never estimate the more time to travel, they just wake up late and drive in rush to reach work by time. As a result, it causes mishap. Also, some driver is so cruel that if someone get slight tough from their truck, they murder the victim by moving their vehicles back to lead them die. If government abide some rules like a death sentence to those drivers who intend to kill. So there will be less chances of those cruetly disaster in roads. On the other hand, there are still others ways to motivate people for safety. For instance, drinking and driving is major reasons for a vehicle accidenthazard for adults in this generation. So, it must be strictly bounded. Secondly, not allowing people to drive more than 40km/ hr speed in road, whether it is school zone or anywhere else. Thirdly, fake licences are also problematic because there are a number of people who are driving their vehicles illegally. So such investigation should be done to find out the people who are driving unethically. To sum up, punishment like death sentence is necessary for those drivers who are Curel but proper investigation should be done before stamping someone guilty. Also there are various ways to encourage people to drive safe by educating them about simple rules.
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seen
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some
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people
believe that
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government
should abide strict
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rules
for the
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drivers
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who
break the
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rules
,
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but
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other
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people
opine that there are
still
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other
ways to minimize such incident.
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However
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i
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agree
with the both statements. This essay will
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explain
the reasons below.

To
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begin
with, it is inarguable that
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people
are less responsible in recent days. If they
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have to
go to work they never estimate the more time to travel, they
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just
wake up late and drive in rush to reach work by time.
As a result
, it causes mishap.
Also
,
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some
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driver
is
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so
cruel that if someone
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get
slight tough from their truck, they murder the victim by moving their vehicles back to lead them
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die
.
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If
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government
abide
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some
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rules
like a death sentence to those
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drivers
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who
intend to kill.
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So
there will be
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less
chances of those
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cruetly
disaster in roads.

On the
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other
hand, there are
still
others ways to motivate
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people
for safety.
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, drinking and driving is major reasons for a vehicle
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accidenthazard
for adults in this generation.
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, it
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must
be
strictly
bounded.
Secondly
, not allowing
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people
to drive more than
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40km
/ hr speed in road, whether it is school zone or anywhere else.
Thirdly
, fake
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licences
are
also
problematic
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because
there are a number of
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people
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who
are driving their vehicles
illegally
.
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So
such investigation should
be done
to find out the
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people
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who
are driving
unethically
.

To sum up, punishment like death sentence is necessary for those
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drivers
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who
are
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Curel
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but
proper investigation should
be done
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before
stamping someone guilty.
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Also
there are various ways to encourage
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people
to drive safe by educating them about simple
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rules
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
24Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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