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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give opinion. v.2

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 2
Strict penalties for bad drivers are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Even though, there are other solutions would be more effective in improving road safety, this will not replace the strict penalties in preventing road accidents. Nowadays, the number of road accidents has been increased, the reason for this are many, such as; drunk while driving, bad driving attitude and lack of driving experience. One of the worst subjects on the road is a drunk driver, this kind of driver may cause terrible damage to the other people, because they are driving in an uncontrollable way. Furthermore, there is a kind of a driver that has lack of driving experience, however, he or she is less dangerous because the driver is still in control. Although, there are other solutions instead of the strict penalties, such as; encouraging the drivers to not drive while they are drunk, improve propaganda, but the number of road accidents was still high. This is because of a bad behaviour of the drivers have been developed for a very long time, hence, the behaviour is like a disease without a cure. Finally, when there are no hopes with the alternative solutions, the drivers need the strict penalties to remind them of taking more responsibility when they are driving.
Strict
penalties
for
bad
drivers
are the key to reducing traffic accidents.
Even though
, there are other solutions would be more effective in improving
road
safety, this will not replace the
strict
penalties
in preventing
road
accidents.

Nowadays, the number of
road
accidents has
been increased
, the reason for this are
many
, such as; drunk while
driving
,
bad
driving
attitude and lack of
driving
experience. One of the worst subjects on the
road
is a drunk
driver
, this kind of
driver
may cause terrible damage to the other
people
,
because
they are
driving
in an uncontrollable way
.
Furthermore
, there is a
kind of a
driver
that has lack of
driving
experience,
however
, he or she is less
dangerous
because
the
driver
is
still
in control.

Although, there are other solutions
instead
of the
strict
penalties
, such as; encouraging the
drivers
to not drive while they
are drunk
,
improve
propaganda,
but
the number of
road
accidents was
still
high. This is
because
of a
bad
behaviour
of the
drivers
have
been developed
for a
very
long time,
hence
, the
behaviour
is like a disease without a cure.

Finally
, when there are no hopes with the alternative solutions, the
drivers
need the
strict
penalties
to remind them of taking more responsibility when they are
driving
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 2

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