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Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v.14

Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 14
Road safety has become a great concern for people with the rise of accidents and fatality those accidents cause every day. People have a varying opinion on how to make roads safe and I believe strict laws should be there to punish the driving offenders but a combination of other methods would bring better results. On the one hand, people seem to abide by a law or rule when they know that violation would bring severe retribution. For instance, in some Asian countries pedestrians used to cross the roads and when a more rigid penalty has been imposed, those very people started using the underpass. From this perspective, strict penalty and fine can certainly improve the road safety as people would be more cautious and afraid of the consequence of the violation of the traffic laws. As an outcome, it is a fact that, the sterner the punishment, the greater chances that people would follow the rules. On the other hand, there are already severe punishments for driving offenders including ceasing the driving license, monetary fines and imprisonments. Despite this, the number of road accidents is increasing every year. This is why I believe that only punishment cannot ensure the road security and safety. A combination of other initiatives is also required. First, we need to aware people about the devastating consequences traffic rule violations can bring to our life. Second, the requirements for passing the driving test should be standardised and made more practical, especially in developing countries where people can use advantages of the corruption. It is often noticed that many young people are given driving license without scrutinising their experience and skills. This should be completely avoided and after a certain period, each driver should be retested. Third, unfit vehicles should not be allowed to run on the roads as these cars cause more accidents according to the recent Road Transport Authority report. Finally, the traffic system of a country should be modernised and more surveillance cameras and speed test cameras should be there. To conclude, punishment to traffic rule violators is a good way to make the road safer but the combination of other steps would bring more desired results.
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safety has become a great concern for
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people
with the rise of
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accidents
and fatality those
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accidents
cause every day.
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have a varying opinion on how to
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make
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roads
safe and I believe strict laws should be there to punish the
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offenders
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a combination of
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other
methods would
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bring
better results.

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people
seem to abide by a law or
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rule
when they know that violation would
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bring
severe retribution.
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some
Asian countries pedestrians
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used
to cross the
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roads
and when a more rigid penalty has
been imposed
, those
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people
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started
using the underpass. From this perspective, strict penalty and fine can
certainly
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improve
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safety as
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would be more cautious and afraid of the consequence of the violation of the
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traffic
laws. As an outcome, it is a fact that, the sterner the
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punishment
, the greater chances that
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people
would follow the
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rules
.

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hand, there are already severe
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punishments
for
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driving
offenders including ceasing the
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driving
license, monetary fines and imprisonments. Despite this, the number of
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road
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accidents
is increasing every year. This is why I believe that
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only
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punishment
cannot ensure the
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road
security and safety. A combination of
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other
initiatives is
also
required.
First
, we need to aware
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people
about the devastating consequences
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traffic
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rule
violations can
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bring
to our life. Second, the requirements for passing the
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driving
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test
should be
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standardised
and made more practical,
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in
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developing countries
where
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people
can
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use
advantages of the corruption. It is
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noticed that
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young
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are
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driving
license without
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their experience and
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skills
. This should be completely avoided and after a certain period, each driver should
be retested
. Third, unfit vehicles should not be
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allowed
to run on the
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roads
as these cars cause more
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accidents
according to the recent
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Road
Transport Authority report.
Finally
, the
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traffic
system of a country should be
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modernised
and more surveillance cameras and speed
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test
cameras should be there.

To conclude
,
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punishment
to
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traffic
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rule
violators is a
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way to
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the
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road
safer
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the combination of
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other
steps would
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bring
more desired results.
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43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. v. 14

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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