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Some people think that secondary or high school student should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. Do you agree or disagree with the statement? v.2

Some people think that secondary or high school student should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. v. 2
Few people think that cash management is the most important life skill that needs to be taught to students in secondary/high school, while most people think that there are many other important factors such as discipline. In my opinion, I agree that wealth administration is the one of the important life skill factors, which need to be taught to students with other life skills elements. Initially, schooling person need to know the importance of cash as it is the most important factor in the living entity. In School, Teachers need to instruct students regarding the use of currency in our daily life. For instance, the average amount needed for a person to live in Chicago is $1000/month. This gives the information how much the currency is important in regular activity. Secondly, undergraduate needs to know the importance of savings in their life. For example, a person in the USA has a monthly expenditure of $5000/month, then after retirement, he should save the sufficient amount to survive each month. By the example the graduate can get to know the value of cash. In Schooling, Student needs to be taught with different techniques for money management. Finally, In the Secondary school, Pupil also need to know the other important life skills like discipline, time management, etc. Time management should be explained to Pupils as they need to be aware of what sort of things to be done at the right time and student need to know how to behave in the society. A student also have respect for their nation and environment. In conclusion, I agree that money management is one of the most important factors which need to be taught to students in high school as it is an important life skill, while the teacher should also explain the student about their important life skill factors.
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management
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skill
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important
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factors
such as discipline. In my opinion, I
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agree
that wealth administration is the one of the
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important
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life
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skill
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factors
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need
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students
with other
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life
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skills
elements.

Initially
, schooling person
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need
to
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know
the importance of cash as it is the most
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important
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factor
in the living entity. In
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School
, Teachers
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need
to instruct
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students
regarding the
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use
of currency in our daily
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life
.
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, the average amount needed for a person to
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live
in Chicago is $1000/month. This gives the information how much the currency is
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important
in regular activity.

Secondly
, undergraduate
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needs
to
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know
the importance of savings in their
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life
.
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, a person in the USA has a monthly expenditure of $5000/month, then after retirement, he should save the sufficient amount to survive each month. By the example the graduate can
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get
to
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know
the value of cash. In Schooling,
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Student
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needs
to
be taught
with
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different
techniques for money management.

Finally
, In the Secondary
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school
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need
to
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know
the other
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important
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life
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skills
like discipline, time
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management
, etc. Time
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management
should be
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to Pupils as they
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need
to be aware of what sort of things to
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at the right time and
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student
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to
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know
how to behave in the society. A
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student
also
have respect for their nation and environment.

In conclusion
, I
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management
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important
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factors
which
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need
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students
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school
as it is an
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important
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life
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skill
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explain
the
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student
about their
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life
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skill
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factors
.
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IELTS essay Some people think that secondary or high school student should be taught how to use money management as it is an important life skill. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
305 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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