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Some people think that science is bone for us while others think that it is bane for human beings. Discuss both sides. v.2

Some people think that science is bone for us while others think that it is bane for human beings. v. 2
Science has brought many benefits to human kind therefore people believe that it is core for human life and society but few people think that it is of no use and disadvantages are also palpable. I shall explain both sides of arguments in essay. People who consider science as non-useful for human life have some valid points. Firstly, though science has helped us to overcome the challenges of life, it generated so many problems for humans. Nowadays it is considered that almost every disease is curable but still people die even after advanced treatment. For example, my brother was diagnosed with heart attack problem and while getting treatment, his kidney affected owing to die used in surgery. Secondly, science divided the world and causes conflict among the nations. It is considered that nations who got developed science try to show supremacy with other countries and engage in altercation and eventually in war sometimes. However, science not only extended the human life but also ease the life for everyone on this planet. Medical science helped the humans to live longer and healthy as it change the metabolism in body which make the people active and give longevity in life. For instance, mortality rate for children worldwide reduced drastically, particularly in underdeveloped nations. Another benefit of science is development of robots which take the all cumbersome tasks of human and compete it efficiently and saves human from physical injuries. To conclude, while there are many advantages of science, unwise use of science brought havoc to human being and destroy life in a city or country as world has witnessed this in many wars.
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benefits to
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people
believe that it is
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life
and society
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but
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think
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and disadvantages are
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explain
both sides of arguments in essay.

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People
who consider
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science
as non-useful for
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human
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life
have
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some
valid points.
Firstly
, though
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science
has
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helped
us to overcome the challenges of
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life
, it generated
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so
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many
problems for
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humans
. Nowadays it
is considered
that almost every disease is curable
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but
still
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people
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die
even after advanced treatment.
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, my brother
was diagnosed
with heart attack problem and while getting treatment, his kidney
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affected
owing to
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die
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used
in surgery.
Secondly
,
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science
divided the world and causes conflict among the nations. It
is considered
that nations who
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got
developed
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science
try to
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show
supremacy with other countries and engage in altercation and
eventually
in war
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sometimes
.

However
,
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science
not
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extended the
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human
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life
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also
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ease
the
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life
for everyone on this planet. Medical
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science
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helped
the
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humans
to
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live
longer and healthy as it
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change
the metabolism in body which
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make
the
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people
active and give longevity in
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life
.
For instance
, mortality rate for children worldwide
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reduced
drastically
,
particularly
in underdeveloped nations. Another benefit of
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science
is development of robots which take the all cumbersome tasks of
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human
and compete it
efficiently
and saves
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human
from physical injuries.

To conclude
, while there are
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many
advantages of
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science
, unwise
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use
of
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science
brought havoc to
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human
being and
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destroy
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life
in a city or country as world has witnessed this in
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many
wars.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that science is bone for us while others think that it is bane for human beings. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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