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some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. v. 2
Students are digital natives. They have grown up with technology; it is woven into their lives. Some people believe that it is useful to use technology as a learning tool in classrooms. Whereas, other people believe that it just creates a distraction. I will discuss both the views in the upcoming paragraphs. To begin with, using technology in the classroom allows you to experiment more in pedagogy and get instant feedback. For instance, it will enable the students for more active learning and can increase engagement through online polling or asking quiz questions during lectures. Secondly, technology ensures full participation in the classroom, which helps shy students as well who would not usually raise their hands in class. Also, it allows the teacher to regularly check in with the students for feedback on course materials and assignments. On the flip side, technology can be a distraction in the classroom. There are always some students who may find it hard to concentrate during lectures when a wide range of digital devices are around them. Furthermore, with the use of technology, it can be easy to foster cheating in class and on assignments. For example, the digital age makes it easier-from copying- and- pasting someone else's work to hiring an essay- writer from an online essay mill. Last but not least, some students do not have equal access to technology. To illustrate, some students cannot afford iPods, laptops or even the textbooks required for classes and learning. To conclude, it is clear that the benefits outweigh the cons. Technology can be a highly useful tool, but that is all it is- a tool. In today's hyper-connected world, constructive use of technology can enhance learning efficiently.
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technology
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technology
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creates a distraction. I will discuss both the views in the upcoming paragraphs.

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technology
in the classroom
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allows
you to experiment more in pedagogy and
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get
instant feedback.
For instance
, it will enable the
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students
for more active learning and can increase engagement through online polling or asking quiz questions during lectures.
Secondly
,
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technology
ensures full participation in the classroom, which
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helps
shy
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class
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the teacher to
regularly
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students
for feedback on course materials and assignments.

On the flip side,
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technology
can be a distraction in the classroom. There are always
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students
who may find it
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use
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, it can be easy to foster cheating in
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class
and on assignments.
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students
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. To illustrate,
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iPods
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today
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technology
can enhance learning
efficiently
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IELTS essay some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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