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some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. v. 1
It is a common belief that technological devices are crucial as a learning hub for students. On the contrary, another belief, it restricts their imagination. I will briefly discuss both viewpoint by supporting technology in education. In the modern life, technology has developed dramatically. There are plenty tech devices are preferred using in education in order to influence learning in a positive way. For example, personal computers, voice recorder tools, smart boards are significantly necessary to educate. These devices utilize to reach information very quickly, and also create, imagine in students' minds to hold. The students use them can not waste of time for writing, in everywhere a learning centre and a notebook due to the internet. Doubtless, technology has remarkable effects in teaching. On the other hand, many parents complete about their child's overusing the technological devices. Thus, this child cannot focus on main subjects. However, it is more time using screens can far from away their basic subject. Nobody cannot deny it, although, to admitted consciously using technology as a learning hub affects mostly positive. The best example possibly the rival about small town and city centre schooling. In the small town has less developed tech tools so students are only average, however in the city centre they are more successful because of having smart boards and laptops with wifi. If technology would used for enough time, it had remarked to success. In conclusion, I restate, in my perspective education with technology including is more effective than classic methods. I firmly support high technology in literacy.
It is a common belief that technological
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devices
are crucial as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
hub for students.
On the contrary
, another belief, it restricts their imagination. I will
briefly
discuss both viewpoint by supporting
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technology
in education.

In the modern life,
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technology
has developed
dramatically
. There are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
tech
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devices
are preferred
using in education in order to influence
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
way.
For example
, personal computers, voice recorder tools, smart boards are
significantly
necessary to educate. These
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devices
utilize to reach information
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very
quickly
, and
also
create, imagine in students' minds to hold. The students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
them can not waste of time for writing, in everywhere a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
and a notebook due to the internet. Doubtless,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
has remarkable effects in teaching.

On the other hand
,
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many
parents complete about their child's overusing the technological
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
.
Thus
, this child cannot focus on main subjects.
However
, it is more time using screens can far from away their basic subject. Nobody cannot deny it, although, to admitted
consciously
using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
as a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
hub affects
mostly
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
. The best example
possibly
the rival about
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small
town and city
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
schooling. In the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
town has less developed tech tools
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so
students are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
average,
however
in the city
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centre
they are more successful
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of having smart boards and laptops with
Did you mean "Wi-Fi"? (This is the officially approved term by the Wi-Fi Alliance.)
wifi
. If
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technology
would
The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: "use"
used
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
time, it had remarked to success.

In conclusion
, I restate, in my perspective education with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
including is more effective than classic methods. I
firmly
support high
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
technology
in literacy.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that technology in education can be a bone for students. Other people believe that it just create distraction. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
258 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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