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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. v.800

It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. v. 800
Debate on awarding extra weightages to history and literature than science has not been settled. It is believed that studying history and art is necessary than science. I believe that this notion is wrong as development in science brought so many benefits to civilization. Studying science subjects offers so many advantages. First and foremost, these subjects are theoretical and practical both which provide an insight about the concepts. Students not only understand the concepts but also do it in laboratory and see the formulas turning into stages. For instance, I was taught chemistry theory course and also given an understanding how gas is formed when two substances are mixed. Furthermore, engineering subjects which are mostly derived from core science subjects are innovate in nature and attract students to discern something new. Fervent pupils devote time in small innovation and some time it leads to effective working model. Particularly in technical institutes, labs are opened in day & nights and wards conceptualize their ideas and invent new model. For example, my brother who study in India institute of technology recently contributed in discoveries related to hydro fuel which is a need of the time as it could be possible primary source of fuel in the future. Finally, concept of science solve major problem in the society. Advocates of history and arts believe that science subjects repel students from learning native culture and society. These people contemplate that knowing about history and art enable student to contribute more in society. Granted, study of past events and existing culture enhance the level of information about civilization where they live, but it is seen that people learn about society and culture from the environments and sometimes even science graduates are more knowledgeable than arts stream students and in the past critical problems in society were solved through technology intervention. To sum-up, though arts and history subjects are critical for protecting the nation’s identity and culture, benefits of science can’t be ignored and future lies on innovation and discovery in science and engineering.
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has not
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that studying
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history
and
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art
is
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necessary
than
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science
. I believe that this notion is
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wrong
as development in
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science
brought
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so
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many
benefits to civilization.

Studying
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science
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subjects
offers
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so
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many
advantages.
First
and foremost, these
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subjects
are theoretical and practical both which provide an insight about the concepts.
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Students
not
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only
understand the concepts
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but
also
do it in laboratory and
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see
the formulas turning into stages.
For instance
, I
was taught
chemistry theory course and
also
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given
an understanding how gas
is formed
when two substances
are mixed
.
Furthermore
, engineering
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subjects
which are
mostly
derived from core
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science
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subjects
are
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innovate
in nature and attract
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students
to discern something new. Fervent pupils devote time in
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small
innovation and
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some
time it leads to effective working model.
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in technical institutes, labs
are opened
in day
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&amp
; nights and wards conceptualize their
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ideas
and invent new model.
For example
, my brother who study in India institute of technology recently contributed in discoveries related to hydro fuel which is a need of the time as it could be possible primary source of fuel in the future.

Finally
, concept of
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science
solve major problem in the
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society
. Advocates of
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history
and
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arts
believe that
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science
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subjects
repel
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students
from learning native
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culture
and
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society
. These
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people
contemplate that knowing about
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history
and
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art
enable
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student
to contribute more in
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society
. Granted, study of past
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events
and existing
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culture
enhance the level of information about civilization where they
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live
,
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but
it is
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seen
that
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people
learn about
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society
and
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culture
from the environments and
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sometimes
even
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science
graduates are more knowledgeable than
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arts
stream
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students
and in the past critical problems in
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society
were solved
through technology intervention.

To sum-up, though
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arts
and
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history
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subjects
are critical for protecting the nation’s identity and
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culture
, benefits of
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science
can’t be
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ignored
and future lies on innovation and discovery in
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science
and engineering.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
40Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay It is more important for students to study history and literature than it is for them to study science and mathematics. v. 800

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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