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Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. Do you agree or disagree with this idea? Give reasons for your answer. v.3

Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. with this idea? v. 3
In the modern world, many people are willing to encourage the students to take part in the school management. In this regard, although many citizens are not reckoned to think that this a good idea, others feel that these kinds of methods will be beneficial for the pupils as well as for the teachers. Personally, I believe that if they are involved in administrative works, they can get to know about the situation in the school. Accordingly, they can bring new changes to the system. On the one hand, it is true that the main advantage of involving the pupils in management is the experience, as during the process, students can gain knowledge about the leadership, communication and collaboration with other people. Furthermore, the second advantage of this method is personal growth, as pupils can expand their horizons and evolve the interpersonal skills. To illustrate, many students are supposed to work with other people, which is essential for their development of soft skills, such as communication and co-operation with other individuals. On the other hand, some people are keen to think that educational organizations should not use this methodology, as the children cannot focus on the studying process because of their duties. Moreover, there are can occur minor conflicts because of misunderstanding. For example, it is clear that there are should be an election for the selection of authority among the children. Consequently, this process can be a source of the conflict, as some children are willing to elect their candidate, while other people are keen to vote for other candidates. In conclusion, although many people are reckoned to think that the secondary school should not involve the learners in the management, personally, I believe that this methodology is a viable option for the solving some internal problems, such as helping to the teachers, printing some photos for the holidays and developing learners’ soft skills
In the modern world,
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many
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people
are willing to encourage the students to
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take part
in the school management. In this regard, although
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many
citizens are not reckoned to
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think
that this a
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good
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idea
, others feel that these kinds of methods will be beneficial for the pupils
as well
as for the teachers.
Personally
, I believe that if they
are involved
in administrative works, they can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to know about the situation in the school.
Accordingly
, they can bring new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
to the system.

On the one hand, it is true that the main advantage of involving the pupils in management is the experience, as during the process, students can gain knowledge about the leadership, communication and collaboration with
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other
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people
.
Furthermore
, the second advantage of this method is personal growth, as pupils can expand their horizons and evolve the interpersonal
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skills
. To illustrate,
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many
students
are supposed
to work with
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other
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people
, which is essential for their development of soft
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skills
, such as communication and co-operation with
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other
individuals.

On the
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hand,
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some
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are keen to
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that educational organizations should not
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use
this methodology, as the children cannot focus on the studying process
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because
of their duties.
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, there are can occur minor conflicts
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because
of misunderstanding.
For example
, it is
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that there are should be an election for the selection of authority among the children.
Consequently
, this process can be a source of the conflict, as
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some
children are willing to elect their candidate, while
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other
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people
are keen to vote for
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other
candidates.

In conclusion
, although
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many
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people
are reckoned
to
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think
that the secondary school should not involve the learners in the management,
personally
, I believe that this methodology is a viable option for the solving
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some
internal problems, such as helping to the teachers, printing
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some
photos for the holidays and developing learners’ soft
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skills
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that schools should involve students in school management. with this idea? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
314 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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