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Describe an idea you have had for improving something at college or work. You should include: When and where had you had the idea? what the idea was? Who you told about your idea? and explain why you think that your idea made a difference? v.1

Describe an idea you have had for improving something at college or work. You should include: When and where had you had the idea? what the idea was? Who you told about your idea? and explain why you think that your idea made a difference? v. 1
Today's individual; wants to live a high quality life which they can obtain from urban areas. But, staying in suburb area is not that easy because of the various daily life issues. Firstly, this essay will discuss the prime issue which people face on a regular basis and secondly, explain, how government can inspire individuals to stay or relocate to rural areas. First of all, the traffic problem is the main issue of today's urban lifestyle. This is because, vehicle congestion often causes noise and air pollution from vehicles. In the future, this will lead to environmental damage which is intolerable after seeing the increase in global warming effect. For instance, environmental study has shown that air damaging is rising constantly every year about 2% in comparing to the previous year. On the suggestion side, to reduce the future problem, authority can provide various opportunities such as opening a new business or offering higher pay to people who already living in the smaller communities. This step will restrict folks from relocating to bigger cities and also, inspire suburb workers to come and find a high salary employment in villages. As a result, there will be a development in the smaller communities and decrease in pollution and population in the urban cities. For example, Indian government has launched a new law in 2010 which is in effect till now and depicted that pollution has been declining since the people have not moved and more people came to work in rural areas. In conclusion, Lager cities are indeed facing a numerous issue like a job shortage because of the increase in competition in the cities. Hence, I believe, not only government is responsible to think about future negative impact but individuals as well. Nevertheless, no one has right to force anybody for anything in the world.
Today
's individual; wants to
live
a high quality life which they can obtain from urban areas.
But
, staying in suburb area is not that easy
because
of the various daily life
issues
.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the prime
issue
which
people
face on a regular basis and
secondly
,
explain
, how
government
can inspire individuals to stay or relocate to rural areas.

First of all
, the traffic problem is the main
issue
of
today
's urban lifestyle. This is
because
, vehicle congestion
often
causes noise and air pollution from vehicles. In the future, this will lead to environmental damage which is intolerable after seeing the increase in global warming effect.
For instance
, environmental study has shown that air damaging is rising
constantly
every year about 2% in comparing to the previous year.

On the suggestion side, to
reduce
the future problem, authority can provide various opportunities such as opening a new business or offering higher pay to
people
who already living in the smaller communities. This step will restrict folks from relocating to bigger
cities
and
also
, inspire suburb workers to
come
and find a high salary employment in villages.
As a result
, there will be a development in the smaller communities and decrease in pollution and population in the urban
cities
.
For example
, Indian
government
has launched a new law in 2010 which is in effect till
now
and depicted that pollution has been declining since the
people
have not
moved
and more
people
came to work in rural areas.

In conclusion
, Lager
cities
are
indeed
facing a numerous
issue
like a job shortage
because
of the increase in competition in the
cities
.
Hence
, I believe, not
only
government
is responsible to
think
about future
negative
impact
but
individuals
as well
.
Nevertheless
, no one has right to force anybody for anything in the world.
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IELTS essay Describe an idea you have had for improving something at college or work. You should include: When and where had you had the idea? what the idea was? Who you told about your idea? and explain why you think that your idea made a difference? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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