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some people think that schools select student according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have student with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and give you own opinions v.2

some people think that schools select student according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have student with different abilities studying together. 2
It is commonly believed that it is more beneficial to students’ development if student attend in the mixed ability school, however, some people contend that streaming students according to their educational abilities into separate school is utilizable to the education system. I opine that, it would be more effective and efficient in terms of both teaching and learning while streaming of students implemented. On the one hand, it is evident that student learning with various abilities together are likely to achieve positive outcomes in all-round abilities. Mixed abilities classes offer student opportunities to learn from each other, thus, to develops abilities that were absent from them previously. For instance, a sophomore with an excellent academic ability can learn how to dance or paint from peers who are less academic but rather artistic. Consequently, mixed classes encourage students to develops their multi-dimensional abilities rather than single educational ability. On the other hand, steaming students accordingly to their academic abilities generate more benefits to teachers and students. As to teacher, it is more convenient to discover suitable teaching methodologies to accommodate a group of students with similar abilities. Thus, streaming students makes it much easier for teachers to control their students more conveniently and easily. Furthermore, streaming enable students to learn in an effective way. According to students’ different abilities, they are taught in different ways that are more suitable to for them. One example of this is that teachers explain the study material more slowly to those in bottom streams as compared to top streams. To conclude, mixed ability classes are beneficial for students’ versatile development, but in my view point, segregating students based on different academic abilities is better for both teacher and students.
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commonly
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students’
development if
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student
attend in the
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mixed
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ability
school,
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,
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people
contend that
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streaming
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students
according to their educational
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abilities
into separate school is utilizable to the education system. I opine that, it would be more effective and efficient in terms of both teaching and learning while
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streaming
of
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students
implemented.

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student
learning with various
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abilities
together are likely to achieve
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positive
outcomes in all-round
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abilities
.
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Mixed
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abilities
classes offer
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student
opportunities to learn from each other,
thus
, to develops
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abilities
that were absent from them previously.
For instance
, a sophomore with an excellent
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academic
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ability
can learn how to dance or paint from peers who are less
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academic
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but
rather
artistic.
Consequently
,
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mixed
classes encourage
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students
to
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develops
their multi-dimensional
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abilities
rather
than single educational ability.

On the other hand
, steaming
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students
accordingly
to their
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academic
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abilities
generate more benefits to
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teachers
and
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students
. As to
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teacher
, it is more convenient to discover suitable teaching methodologies to accommodate a group of
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students
with similar
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abilities
.
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,
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streaming
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students
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makes
it much easier for
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teachers
to control their
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students
more
conveniently
and
easily
.
Furthermore
,
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streaming
enable
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students
to learn
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in an effective way
. According to
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students’
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different
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abilities
, they
are taught
in
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different
ways that are more suitable to for them. One example of this is that
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teachers
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explain
the study material more
slowly
to those in bottom streams as compared to top streams.

To conclude
,
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mixed
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ability
classes are beneficial for
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students’
versatile development,
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but
in my view point, segregating
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students
based on
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different
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academic
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abilities
is better for both
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teacher
and
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students
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
47Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay some people think that schools select student according to their academic abilities. Others believe that it is better to have student with different abilities studying together. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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