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Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. Discuss both views and state your own opinion. v.3

Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 3
Some people contend that mixed ability classes are more beneficial for children’s development than streaming them on the basis of judgement about their academic abilities. However, from my perspective, I disagree with this contention. Admittedly, mixed ability classes provide a better environment for children’s all-round development. In such classes, children with different abilities study together and in turn they can learn from one another. For example, a student, who is good at academic study, but weak in dancing or painting, can learn how to dance or paint from his peers. In this sense, mixed ability classes allow students to develop their abilities in different subjects instead of only academic abilities. Despite the argument above, I believe streaming students bringing more benefits to teachers and students. As for teachers, separating children with better academic abilities from others facilitates effective teaching. This practice helps teachers to control their students more conveniently and easily. Compared with mixed ability in which teacher should consider students’ differences when they are using teaching methodologies, streaming makes this situation simpler. To be more specific, students are at the same level of academic ability in a class, and in turn teachers can use the same methodologies of them all. In this way, the narrower the spread of ability in the class, the more convenient the teaching can be. On top of this, steaming enables students to learn in an effective way. According to students’ different abilities, they are taught in different ways that are more suitable for them. In the top streams, students use more difficult materials, therefore, they can learn more. In sharp contrast, teachers can explain the material more slowly to those in bottom streams. Under this circumstance, students with different academic abilities can study effectively and efficiently. In the final analysis, mixed ability classes are beneficial for students’ versatile development, but in my opinion, segregating students based on different academic ability is better for both teachers and students.
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contend that
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mixed
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ability
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classes
are more beneficial for
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children’s
development than streaming them on the basis of judgement about their
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academic
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abilities
.
However
, from my perspective, I disagree with this contention.

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,
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mixed
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ability
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classes
provide a better environment for
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children’s
all-round development. In such
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classes
,
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children
with
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different
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abilities
study together and in turn they can
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learn
from one another.
For example
, a
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student
, who is
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good
at
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academic
study,
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but
weak in dancing or painting, can
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learn
how to dance or paint from his peers. In this sense,
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mixed
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ability
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classes
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allow
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students
to develop their
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abilities
in
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different
subjects
instead
of
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only
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academic
abilities.

Despite the argument above, I believe streaming
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students
bringing more benefits to
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teachers
and
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students
. As for
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teachers
, separating
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children
with better
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academic
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abilities
from others facilitates effective teaching. This practice
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helps
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teachers
to control their
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students
more
conveniently
and
easily
. Compared with
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mixed
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ability
in which
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teacher
should consider
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students’
differences when they are using teaching methodologies, streaming
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makes
this situation simpler. To be more specific,
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students
are at the same level of
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academic
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ability
in a
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class
, and in turn
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teachers
can
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use
the same methodologies of them all. In this way, the narrower the spread of
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ability
in the
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class
, the more convenient the teaching can be.

On top of this, steaming enables
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students
to
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learn
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in an effective way
. According to
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students’
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different
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abilities
, they
are taught
in
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different
ways that are more suitable for them. In the top streams,
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students
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use
more difficult materials,
therefore
, they can
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learn
more. In sharp contrast,
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teachers
can
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explain
the material more
slowly
to those in bottom streams. Under this circumstance,
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students
with
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different
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academic
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abilities
can study
effectively
and
efficiently
.

In the final analysis,
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mixed
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ability
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classes
are beneficial for
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students’
versatile development,
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but
in my opinion, segregating
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students
based on
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different
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academic
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ability
is better for both
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teachers
and
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students
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
66Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that schools should select students according to their academic abilities, while others believe that it is better to have students with different abilities studying together. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
323 words
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