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Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree? v.2

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. v. 2
Developing countries have always been wealthy with a large proportion of natural resources, and a higher standard in their public sector. Some people argue that their wealth should be used to help developing countries. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this viewpoint. One major point to note is that helping the poor country will help in developing those countries, this can be done through the help of grants support in their public sector, Education especially will be a huge help when assistance is gotten in this part because this will help train the young people of the city, so they will be able to give back to their society. In addition, this will also lead to a friendship point between the two countries. For example, in a survey carried out, it was discovered that the rate at which the standard of a developing country is increased is twice when they are assisted specifically in the education section. Another benefit to is the trade opportunities this open up between the nation. This opportunity can be available when the countries of lesser standard are exposed to the assistance of the great nations. Chances to export their local products is available which will bridge the gap with other countries. For instance, It was discovered that when developing countries start to export their products, it also raises their standard of living as the majority of them are favoured in farm products which they cultivated. In conclusion, assisting developing countries through their public administration in terms of education and health care will greatly improve the standard of such province. In my opinion, I support that the countries should be helped through their health and education sections.
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argue that their wealth should be
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One major point to note is that helping the poor
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will
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help
in
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developing
those
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, this can
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help
of grants support in their public sector,
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in this part
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so
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countries
.
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standard
of a
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developing
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country
is increased
is twice when they
are assisted
specifically
in the
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education
section.

Another benefit to is the trade opportunities this open up between the nation. This opportunity can be available when the
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countries
of lesser
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standard
are exposed
to the assistance of the great nations. Chances to export their local products is available which will bridge the gap with other
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countries
.
For instance
, It
was discovered
that when
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developing
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countries
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start
to export their products, it
also
raises their
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standard
of living as the majority of them are
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favoured
in farm products which they cultivated.

In conclusion
, assisting
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developing
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countries
through their public administration in terms of
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education
and health care will
greatly
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improve
the
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standard
of such province. In my opinion, I support that the
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countries
should be
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helped
through their health and
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education
sections.
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IELTS essay Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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