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Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.2

Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. v. 2
People’s opinion towards public libraries is various. Some people perceive that public libraries play a crucial role in the society while others disagree. In this essay, I shall discuss both perspective in detail before reaching a final verdict that the library is essential for the public. There are various compelling reasons why it is significant to have public libraries in the public and the prominent one is that the existence of the public library is beneficial for people’s personal development as it enables people to access a wide range of knowledge and information more easily and effectively, which could expand the scope of knowledge and reward them later on in the future. For instance, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that nearly 80% of the students in the university hold the view that having access to the public library is critical. Therefore, public libraries have a profound impact on us. However, some oppose this notion and says that the society could be adversely affected by public libraries because there are various recreational books, such as comic books and magazines in the library that can provide a huge distraction to the youngsters who lack of restraints then waste their precious time. Take myself for example, I used to spend an excessive amount of time on reading notions in the public library when I was a high school student. As a result, it could generate some detrimental implications for the younger generation. To sum up, it is still debatable that if public libraries are significant for people. Taking everything into consideration, I’m inclined to say that it is crucial for us to have libraries in the public even though there are a few potential and minor drawbacks associated with them.
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opinion towards
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public
libraries is various.
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Some
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people
perceive that
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public
libraries play a crucial role in the society while others disagree. In this essay, I shall discuss both perspective in detail
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before
reaching a final verdict that the library is essential for the public.

There are various compelling reasons why it is significant to have
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
libraries in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
and the prominent one is that the existence of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
library is beneficial for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people’s
personal development as it enables
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to access a wide range of knowledge and information more
easily
and
effectively
, which could expand the scope of knowledge and reward them later on in the future.
For instance
, a recent survey conducted in Japan has revealed that
nearly
80% of the students in the university hold the view that having access to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
library is critical.
Therefore
,
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public
libraries have a profound impact on us.

However
,
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some
oppose this notion and says that the society could be
adversely
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affected
by
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public
libraries
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
there are various recreational books, such as comic books and magazines in the library that can provide a huge distraction to the youngsters who lack of restraints then waste their precious time. Take myself
for example
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to spend an excessive amount of time on reading notions in the
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public
library when I was a high school student.
As a result
, it could generate
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
detrimental implications for the younger generation.

To sum up, it is
still
debatable that if
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public
libraries are significant for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
. Taking everything into consideration, I’m inclined to say that it is crucial for us to have libraries in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
even though
there are a few potential and minor drawbacks associated with them.
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IELTS essay Some people believe public libraries are not important for people, others disagree about this statement. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
290 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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