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Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. To what extend do you agree? v.1

Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. v. 1
Provision of assistance by wealthy nations to nations that are not wealthy, in terms of health and education is necessary. Some people and I are of the opinion that rich countries should assist poor countries due to the inherent advantages of doing so. This will be explained further. There are many reasons why wretched nations need assistance of rich ones, one of such is in the area of health care. Provisions of aids to these nations will help in fighting deadly diseases. For example, Ebola outbreak in Nigeria in 2015. Nigeria was able to defeat the diseases with support from countries such as the USA and the UK. The timely intervention of these giant countries helped eradicate Ebola in Nigeria, thereby preventing a deadly outbreak of the diseases which could have killed millions of people in the country. The outbreak could have also spread to other countries including these two big countries as people are always travelling from one part of the world to the other. Another area where rich countries need to support poor countries is in education. Education helps in liberating people and empowering nationalities of these nations. For example, it is only when people are educated that they will be able to use new inventions such as telephones, cars, laptops, television e. t. c. that are manufactured by the rich nation thereby creating new markets for such products. This will also help in improving their economy. In conclusion, I believe that helping poor countries in terms of health and education will help prevent outbreak of deadly diseases and also create more markets for companies of these rich countries.
Provision of assistance by wealthy
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nations
to
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nations
that are not wealthy, in terms of health and
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education
is necessary.
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Some
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people
and I are of the opinion that
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rich
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countries
should assist poor
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countries
due to the inherent advantages of doing
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so
. This will be
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explained
further
.

There are
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many
reasons why wretched
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nations
need assistance of
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rich
ones, one of such is in the area of health care. Provisions of aids to these
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nations
will
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help
in fighting deadly
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diseases
.
For example
, Ebola
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outbreak
in Nigeria in 2015. Nigeria was able to defeat the
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diseases
with support from
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countries
such as the USA and the UK. The timely intervention of these giant
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countries
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helped
eradicate Ebola in Nigeria, thereby preventing a deadly
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outbreak
of the
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diseases
which could have killed millions of
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people
in the
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country
. The
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outbreak
could have
also
spread to other
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countries
including these two
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big
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countries
as
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people
are always travelling from one part of the world to the other.

Another area where
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rich
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countries
need to support poor
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countries
is in
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education
.
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Education
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helps
in liberating
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people
and empowering nationalities of these
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nations
.
For example
, it is
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only
when
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people
are educated
that they will be able to
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use
new inventions such as telephones, cars, laptops, television e. t. c. that
are manufactured
by the
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rich
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nation
thereby creating new markets for such products. This will
also
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help
in improving their economy.

In conclusion
, I believe that helping poor
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countries
in terms of health and
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education
will
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help
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prevent
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outbreak
of deadly
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diseases
and
also
create more markets for
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companies
of these
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rich
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countries
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
43Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that rich countries should support poor countries in terms of aid for health care and education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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