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The costs of medical health care are increasing all the time. Governments are finding it difficult to balance the health care budget. Should citizens be totally responsible for their own health costs and take out private health insurance, or is it better to have a comprehensive health care system which provides free health services for all? Discuss v.1

The costs of medical health care are increasing all the time. Governments are finding it difficult to balance the health care budget. Should citizens be totally responsible for their own health costs and take out private health insurance, or is it better to have a comprehensive health care system which provides free health services for all? Discuss v. 1
The controversy surrounding the costs of medical health care is something that has been around for a few decades, and so far, it has seemed impossible to find common ground on the matter with each country adopting the measures that best suit them. While some choose to make the people responsible for their own medical costs others believe that the it is the government that should assume the costs of such needs regardless of the economic status of the person involved. Firstly, one must take into ponderation how much money will the state require to support a free health system for everyone, and also take certain theories into account that may cause the amount of cost to increase. For example, now that the patients don’t need to pay for their medical service it is more probable that they will begin to seek professional medical assistant more frequently. On the other hand, one must also consider the lack of humanity that lies on not treating a patient because one cannot afford the bill. Secondly, a patient that is responsible for its own health costs is most certain to get an insurance. Therefore, the government is likely to profit from its payment in the first years while in the latter years of the person’s life is more likely to have debt caused by the weaker physical state the insured person is in. In conclusion, a person can only be responsible for its own health care services if one possesses a job to pay for them and to own the costs of the insurance. But, this being the case it should also be the government responsibility to guarantee each person has a proper job that allows them to owe such expenses. However, if that is not that case and it is impossible to create circumstances for each individual to earn enough money to pay for their medical bills and make sure the insurance companies still obtain profit. In that case, the option of the state providing an understanding health care system is definitely something to be taken into account.
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responsible for their
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others believe that
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that should assume the
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of such needs regardless of the economic status of the
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person
involved.

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, one
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must
take into
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ponderation
how much money will the state require to support a free
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system for everyone, and
also
take certain theories into account that may cause the amount of
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cost
to increase.
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,
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now
that the patients don’t need to pay for their
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service it is more probable that they will
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begin
to seek professional
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assistant more
frequently
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consider the lack of humanity that lies on not treating a patient
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because
one cannot afford the bill.

Secondly
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that is
responsible for its
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own
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is most certain to
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get
an insurance.
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, the
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is likely to profit from its payment in the
first
years while in the latter years of the
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life is more likely to have debt caused by the weaker physical state the insured
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person
is in.

In conclusion
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can
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be responsible for its
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own
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care services if one possesses a job to pay for them and to
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own
the
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costs
of the insurance.
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, this being the case it should
also
be the
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government
responsibility to guarantee each
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person
has a proper job that
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allows
them to owe such expenses.
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, if
that is
not that case and it is impossible to create circumstances for each individual to earn
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enough
money to pay for their
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medical
bills and
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make
sure the insurance
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companies
still
obtain profit.
In that case
, the option of the state providing an understanding
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health
care system is definitely something to
be taken
into account.
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IELTS essay The costs of medical health care are increasing all the time. Governments are finding it difficult to balance the health care budget. Should citizens be totally responsible for their own health costs and take out private health insurance, or is it better to have a comprehensive health care system which provides free health services for all? Discuss v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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