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Some people think that private health care is better for people. Other say that health care should be free of charge and run by the government. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of private health service. v.1

Some people think that private health care is better for people. Other say that health care should be free of charge and run by the government. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of private health service. v. 1
The homes are the most indispensable aspect of any human being. They provide essentially the shelter and an area where the human can stay protective environment. Many people have the opinion that building owners are responsible for the protective standards of a building. In this essay, the reasons why both builders and government are equally responsible for the safety of the building are discussed. The individual who makes the building should select a safe and protective architecture of it. The architecture of the building should be selected in such a way that it includes risk-free standards. For instance, when the blueprint of a building is created, the necessary exit-path in case of fire should be reserved. The architectural design of a building is decided by the owner. Therefore, the builder must be more inclined to bring security features in the building. Once the building is ready and occupied by people, the local authority must make the necessary arrangements for well-being. Since the administrator is authorized to develop safety features in and around the building, the society-caretaker is also responsible for the welfare of a building. For example, a fire brigade unit can be established by the authority near a major residential area so the fire extinguisher unit can reach on time. Several features are developed in the surrounding locality by the government to provide safety. In my opinion, both the administrator and the building-maker are equally responsible for the protective standards of a building. If a constructor performs his tasks correctly by providing all international features, then the wellbeing of people living in the building will be assured. The government also has a role by establishing necessary features around the building to ensure the safety of individuals. In conclusion, the builders who design and develop the interior, as well as the exterior of the building, have a higher role in the well being of people staying in the building. Moreover, the government is equally responsible for creating a protective environment around the building.
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essentially
the shelter and an area where the human can stay
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protective
environment.
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people
have the opinion that
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building
owners are
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responsible
for the
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protective
standards of a
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building
. In this essay, the reasons why both builders and
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government
are
equally
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responsible
for the safety of the
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building
are discussed
.

The individual who
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makes
the
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building
should select a safe and
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protective
architecture of it. The architecture of the
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building
should
be selected
in such a way that it includes
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risk
-free standards.
For instance
, when the blueprint of a
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building
is created
, the necessary exit-path in case of fire should
be reserved
. The architectural design of a
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building
is decided
by the owner.
Therefore
, the builder
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must
be more inclined to bring security features in the building.

Once the
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building
is ready and occupied by
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people
, the local authority
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must
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make
the necessary arrangements for well-being. Since the administrator
is authorized
to develop safety features in and around the
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building
, the society-caretaker is
also
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responsible
for the welfare of a
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building
.
For example
, a fire brigade unit can
be established
by the authority near a major residential area
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so
the fire extinguisher unit can reach on time. Several features
are developed
in the surrounding locality by the
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government
to provide safety.

In my opinion, both the administrator and the building-maker are
equally
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responsible
for the
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protective
standards of a
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building
. If a constructor performs his tasks
correctly
by providing all international features, then the
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wellbeing
of
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people
living in the
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building
will
be assured
. The
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government
also
has a role by establishing necessary features around the
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building
to ensure the safety of individuals.
In conclusion
, the builders who design and develop the interior,
as well
as the exterior of the
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building
, have a higher role in the
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well being
of
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people
staying in the
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building
.
Moreover
, the
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government
is
equally
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responsible
for creating a
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protective
environment around the
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building
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that private health care is better for people. Other say that health care should be free of charge and run by the government. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of private health service. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
333 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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