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Essay topics: Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages? v.1

Essay topics: Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages? v. 1
In decades, guaranteed health life is of vital importance in our society. While people think that health service shouldn’t be controlled by privately operated medical companies, I would argue that there are more advantages for people to use private health services. On the one hand, private hospitals have their own negative impacts. Firstly, because the government couldn’t set a restriction on prices in private health institutions, they would be able to set high fees for their services such as prescription charges and high-tech machines in the operating theatre. As the result, this may discriminate significantly against those who have a low or modest income as they cannot afford the costs of care or treatment. Secondly, the ultimate aim of private – run medical services is to gain profits so that they pay much more attention to the quantity rather than the quality of services. For example, in some private clinics, there are fewer experienced and qualified medical practitioners as advertised, hence, they don’t come up to the patients’ expectations. On the other hand, there are some reasons why citizens should go to private health institutions for medical services. The first one is that privately-owned hospitals provide faster services, compared to public ones, so there is no need for patients to wait in the long line. Consequently, it would be less time consuming for either patients with life-threatening diseases or those coming for regular check-up to get treatment. In addition, it is easier for people to get access to private services rather than state-owned services in remote areas. For instance, there are more and more private health institutions built mountainous areas which provide a good opportunity for patients to have improved health care, especially those from minority group. In conclusion, despite drawbacks being provided by profit – making corporations, it seems to me that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and people should have medical services in private hospitals
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health
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shouldn’t
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operated
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medical
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, I would argue that there are more advantages for
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people
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use
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private
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health
services.

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private
hospitals have their
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own
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negative
impacts.
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,
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because
the
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government
couldn’t set a restriction on prices in
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private
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health
institutions, they would be able to set high fees for their
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services
such as prescription charges and high-tech machines in the operating
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theatre
. As the result, this may discriminate
significantly
against those who have a low or modest income as they cannot afford the costs of care or treatment.
Secondly
, the ultimate aim of
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private
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–
run
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medical
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services
is to gain profits
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so
that they pay much more attention to the quantity
rather
than the quality of
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services
.
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, in
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private
clinics, there are fewer experienced and qualified
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medical
practitioners as advertised,
hence
, they don’t
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come
up to the
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patients’
expectations.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
reasons why citizens should go to
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private
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health
institutions for
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medical
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services
. The
first
one is that
privately
-
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owned
hospitals provide faster
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services
, compared to public ones,
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so
there is no need for
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patients
to wait in the long line.
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, it would be less
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time consuming
for either
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patients
with life-threatening diseases or those coming for regular
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check
-up to
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get
treatment.
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, it is easier for
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people
to
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get
access to
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services
rather
than state-
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owned
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services
in remote areas.
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, there are more and more
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private
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health
institutions built mountainous areas which provide a
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good
opportunity for
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patients
to have
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improved
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health
care,
especially
those from minority group.

In conclusion
, despite drawbacks
being provided
by profit
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–
making corporations, it seems to me that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages and
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people
should have
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medical
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services
in
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private
hospitals
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Essay topics: Some people think that good health is a basic human need, so the medical service should not be run by profit-making companies. Do you think the disadvantages of private health care outweigh the advantages? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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