Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2
Some people think that prison sentences should not be used in dealing with criminals. Education and job training should be used instead. v. 2
According to some, delinquents should not be send to prison, rather than, education and occupation training should be implemented. I highly agree that education and job training approaches should be adopted instead of prison sentences unless for some dangerous criminals.
To begin with, it is undeniable that crimes including kidnap, mug, murder and smuggle are very dangerous for both people and society. Because, these crimes not only diminish citizen’s quality of life, but also threaten their safety. So, I think that prison should be compulsory for who commit these crimes. By doing this, offenders would be afraid of these severe punishments and are therefore less likely to offend again. Thus, prison provides an opportunity for perpetrators to be reformed. Also, when dangerous offenders are kept in jail, there is any relationship between them and other people. This causes less crime in society and brings about safety for the citizens.
However, in my opinion, many criminals such as who commit crime unintentionally don’t need to send to prison because they are not aware of what they do. A significant percentage of crime stems from insufficient education so raising awareness of people about crimes can greatly deter individuals from doing illegal actions and causes low crime rate. Job training also turns criminals into a skillful person and offer them a great opportunity to land jobs and support themselves.
In conclusion, although I think that prison should be used as a means to deter dangerous crimes, in my opinion education and job training are more sustainable crime-fighting solutions than prison for many offenders.
According to
some
, delinquents should not be
send
to
prison
,
rather
than,
education
and occupation
training
should
be implemented
. I
highly
agree
that
education
and
job
training
approaches should
be adopted
instead
of
prison
sentences unless for
some
dangerous
criminals.
To
begin
with, it is undeniable that
crimes
including kidnap, mug, murder and smuggle are
very
dangerous
for both
people
and society.
Because
, these
crimes
not
only
diminish citizen’s quality of life,
but
also
threaten their safety.
So
, I
think
that
prison
should be compulsory for who commit these
crimes
. By doing this, offenders would be afraid of these severe punishments and are
therefore
less likely to offend again.
Thus
,
prison
provides an opportunity for perpetrators to
be reformed
.
Also
, when
dangerous
offenders are
kept
in jail, there is any relationship between them and other
people
. This causes less
crime
in society and brings about safety for the citizens.
However
, in my opinion,
many
criminals such as who commit
crime
unintentionally
don’t need to
send
to
prison
because
they are not aware of what they do. A significant percentage of
crime
stems from insufficient
education
so
raising awareness of
people
about
crimes
can
greatly
deter individuals from doing illegal actions and causes low
crime
rate.
Job
training
also
turns criminals into a skillful person and offer them a great opportunity to land
jobs
and support themselves.
In conclusion
, although I
think
that
prison
should be
used
as a means to deter
dangerous
crimes
, in my opinion
education
and
job
training
are more sustainable crime-fighting solutions than
prison
for
many
offenders.
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