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News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. v. 1
For many people, news is a regular pan of life. An issue in dispute is whether the massive influence of the press on people’s daily lives denotes a negative development. It is my view that the news media does more good than harm to the society. The news media provides people with much of the information they need on a timely basis, although there are claims that it reports on issues and events purposely. Anecdotal evidence shows that people from all walks of life have the habit of collecting information regularly from the news media, including print, broadcast and Internet-based media. For example, the Free Trade Agreement reached by the Chinese government and its New Zealand counterpart might open up many opportunities for both countries. Furthermore, it should be recognised that the news media can sometimes save lives and reduce casualties. There is a lot of uncertainty about the surroundings, and people are susceptible to the damage caused by accidents, crimes and natural calamity. The media conveys the firsthand information to concerned audiences and enable them to take corresponding actions right away. The authority can declare a state of emergency when it is necessary, organise evacuation and distribute aid to the needy areas. All these efforts count on the news media as the messenger. Despite their significant and ongoing contribution to the society, the news media might sometimes be harmful to the public. It is a convention that the news media exaggerates the magnitude of the real threat (for example, the potential of a terrorism attack), in order to draw the attention of the desired audiences and in pursuit of high audience ratings. It ends up with causing panic among the population. Meanwhile, the news media tends to emphasise some issues or events, which virtually have little relevance to people’s daily lives, such as an occasional multiple vehicle accident, and an affair that a celebrity is involved with. It distracts the audience from something that is much more noteworthy, for instance, poverty, environmental problems, to name but a few. In summary, the role of news media as an information provider should be acknowledged. In case of emergency, it acts as a lifesaver. However, it is not to say that the news media can give people an overall view of the problems in society all the time.
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,
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is a regular pan of life. An issue in dispute is whether the massive influence of the press on
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people’s
daily
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lives
denotes a
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negative
development. It is my view that the
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news
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media
does more
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good
than harm to the society.

The
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news
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media
provides
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people
with much of the
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information
they need on a timely basis, although there are claims that it reports on issues and
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events
purposely
. Anecdotal evidence
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shows
that
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people
from all walks of life have the habit of collecting
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information
regularly
from the
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news
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media
, including print, broadcast and Internet-based
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media
.
For example
, the Free Trade Agreement reached by the Chinese
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government
and its
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New
Zealand counterpart might open up
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many
opportunities for both countries.

Furthermore
, it should be
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recognised
that the
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news
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media
can
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sometimes
save
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lives
and
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reduce
casualties. There is
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a lot of
uncertainty about the surroundings, and
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people
are susceptible to the damage caused by accidents, crimes and natural calamity. The
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media
conveys the firsthand
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information
to concerned
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audiences
and enable them to take corresponding actions right away. The authority can declare a state of emergency when it is necessary,
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organise
evacuation and distribute aid to the needy areas. All these efforts count on the
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news
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media
as the messenger.

Despite their significant and ongoing contribution to the society, the
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news
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media
might
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sometimes
be harmful to the public. It is a convention that the
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news
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media
exaggerates the magnitude of the real threat (
for example
, the potential of a terrorism attack), in order to draw the attention of the desired
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audiences
and in pursuit of high
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audience
ratings. It ends up with causing panic among the population. Meanwhile, the
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news
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media
tends to
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emphasise
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some
issues or
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events
, which
virtually
have
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little
relevance to
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people’s
daily
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lives
, such as an occasional multiple vehicle accident, and an affair that a celebrity
is involved
with. It distracts the
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audience
from something
that is
much more noteworthy,
for instance
, poverty, environmental problems, to name
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but
a few.

In summary, the role of
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news
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media
as an
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information
provider should
be acknowledged
. In case of emergency, it acts as a lifesaver.
However
, it is not to say that the
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news
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media
can give
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people
an
overall
view of the problems in society all the time.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay News media is more influential nowadays. Some people think it is a negative development. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
386 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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