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Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. v. 1
In my opinion, there is some other way to commit a crime except of indigence between people. However, I agree with idea of poverty so it is one of the important factor to criminality. On the one hand, there is some other reasons to criminal act. Firstly, mental disorders are another factor which must be considered. For example, in UK 50% of criminals are suffering from mental health. Secondly, lack of sufficient education in young generation is another reasons. Actually there is direct link between rate of education parents and crime which result in dire consequences. Thirdly, living in countryside and also environmental of life can effect on people living there. It is likely even might be this places faced with drug dealing. So people should accept the consequences of living in this neighborhoods. On the other hand, I also believe that the most significant reasons of crime is poverty. Furthermore, having financial problems are common between people. This is likely to have detrimental effect on their morality also can lead to crime activity. Undeniably. Recent research has shown that the African people are having economic problems. In a other words the more financial problems the more crime in a way that they are faced with high crime rate due to armed criminal such a these countries. In conclusion, it is true that crime has a number of reasons. But in my opinion, poverty is most significant reason human faced in twenty-first century so that is why most people commit a crime.
In my opinion, there is
some
other
way to commit a
crime
except of indigence between
people
.
However
, I
agree
with
idea
of poverty
so
it is one of the
important
factor to criminality.

On the one hand, there is
some
other
reasons
to criminal act.
Firstly
, mental disorders are another factor which
must
be considered
.
For example
, in UK 50% of criminals are suffering from mental health.
Secondly
, lack of sufficient education in young generation is another
reasons
. Actually there is direct link between rate of education parents and
crime
which result in dire consequences.
Thirdly
, living in countryside and
also
environmental of life can effect on
people
living there. It is likely even might be this places faced with drug dealing.
So
people
should accept the consequences of living in
this
neighborhoods.

On the
other
hand, I
also
believe that the most significant
reasons
of
crime
is poverty.
Furthermore
, having financial problems are common between
people
. This is likely to have detrimental effect on their morality
also
can lead to
crime
activity.
Undeniably
. Recent research has shown that the African
people
are having economic problems. In
a
other
words the more financial problems the more
crime
in a way that they
are faced
with high
crime
rate due to armed criminal such a these countries.

In conclusion
, it is true that
crime
has a number of
reasons
.
But
in my opinion, poverty is
most
significant
reason
human faced in twenty-
first
century
so
that is
why most
people
commit a
crime
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
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