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Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 1
Green space is currently one of the most popular trends in the world. The idea of planting more trees in urban area instead of building more houses, therefore, has become a new social issue. To me, I totally agree that planting more trees in open space in urban areas should receive the top priority. The following paragraphs will provide some cases and examples to support my point of view. Planting more trees in cities and towns has brought about more benefits both to the places and the people than may be expected. Let’s take a case of pollution. In big cities, like New York, London, and Paris, for example, both the pollution levels and standards have been getting worse, taking a toll on people’s physical and mental health. Part of this serious problem results from a growing number of new buildings. Green spaces have been drastically reduced. Not enough trees to work as the lunges of the cities; not enough natural filters to purify the air so as to make a clean and safe environment. According to some research, it has been reported that the green color of trees can surprisingly ease people’s minds and relieve stress. That is why people are planting more trees in South Korea where the high rates of suicide and depression have become a social issue awhile. On the other hand, some people, especially yuppies, are much worried about their places of residence in big cities and towns where living spaces are very limited, and with exorbitant prices. Hence, the more spaces devoted to housing, the better opportunity for these people. However, with fewer trees and more houses, city dwellers might be facing a new, unexpected challenge–the aesthetic value. Who wants to live in a grand residence or a luxurious condominium surrounded by concrete spaces and skyscrapers? No more trees, no more green spaces, no more aesthetic value, no values in housing estates. City dwellers one day will leave this town and look for a new town that is lush with trees to be their new places of residence--the places with beautiful scenery. To conclude, even though there are both pros and cons to this debatable issue, I am still inclined to favor planting more trees instead of building more houses to help facilitate people. With problems and cases mentioned earlier, I do believe that creating an environmentally-friendlier place of residence should receive the first priority.
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of
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in urban area
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of building more
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,
therefore
, has become a
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new
social issue. To me, I
totally
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agree
that
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planting
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in open
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space
in urban areas should receive the top priority. The following paragraphs will provide
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some
cases and examples to support my point of view.

Planting more
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in
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cities
and
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towns
has brought about more benefits both to the
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places
and the
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people
than may be
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.
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’s take a case of pollution. In
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big
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cities
, like
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New
York, London, and Paris,
for example
, both the pollution levels and standards have been getting worse, taking a toll on
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people’s
physical and mental health. Part of this serious problem results from a growing number of
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new
buildings.
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Green
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spaces
have been
drastically
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reduced
. Not
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enough
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trees
to work as the lunges of the
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cities
; not
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enough
natural filters to purify the air
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so as to
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make
a clean and safe environment. According to
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some
research, it has
been reported
that the
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green
color of
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trees
can
surprisingly
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ease
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people’s
minds and relieve
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stress
.
That is
why
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people
are
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trees
in South Korea where the high rates of suicide and depression have become a social issue awhile.

On the other hand
,
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some
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people
,
especially
yuppies, are much worried about their
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places
of residence in
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big
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cities
and
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towns
where living
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are
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very
limited, and with exorbitant prices.
Hence
, the more
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spaces
devoted to housing, the better opportunity for these
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people
.
However
, with fewer
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trees
and more
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houses
, city dwellers might be facing a
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new
, unexpected challenge–the aesthetic value. Who wants to
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live
in a grand residence or a luxurious condominium surrounded by concrete
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spaces
and skyscrapers? No more
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trees
, no more
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green
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spaces
, no more aesthetic value, no values in housing estates. City dwellers one day will
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leave
this
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town
and look for a
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new
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town
that is
lush with
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trees
to be their
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new
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places
of residence--the
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places
with
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beautiful
scenery.

To conclude
,
even though
there are both pros and cons to this debatable issue, I am
still
inclined to favor
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planting
more
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trees
instead
of building more
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houses
to
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help
facilitate
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people
. With problems and cases mentioned earlier, I do believe that creating an
environmentally
-friendlier
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place
of residence should receive the
first
priority.
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51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that planting trees in open space in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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