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Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 2
Changing in climate has significant implications for our health and in order to make life healthy, to plant more and more trees become essential. Considering the threat of global warming, this has led to a debate that, whether to consume urban areas by planting trees or making buildings. I completely agree with the view of sufficient plantation to keep control over the earth’s atmosphere. To embark with, growing trees is beneficial to restrict the run-off water of rain fall and reduce the possibility of soil erosion. Moreover, plants provide the oxygen which is, undoubtedly important for human beings. In simple words, planting trees help to make environment safe through controlling the air pollution. For instance, according to a survey, it is observed that, the percentage of air pollution has been found less in the specific area, where there are numbers of trees planted as compared to the area where just few plants have been grown. In addition, planting helps to minimize the heat and provides better environment. It is not neglected that gardens bring nature closer and make people to have pleasure. In Chandigarh, for example, Rock garden is the best garden which nowadays becomes the main attraction for the people. Thus, to lead better healthy lives, it is very important to grow more and more plants in the cities to sustain the ecosystem. To conclude, I support that planting trees in the open spaces of urban area is more essential to reduce the climate hazards and keep people healthy. In future, due to rising temperature, there are chances to face the worst conditions of global warming.
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make
life healthy, to
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plant
more and more
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trees
become essential. Considering the threat of global warming, this has led to a debate that, whether to consume urban
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areas
by
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planting
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trees
or making buildings. I completely
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agree
with the view of sufficient plantation to
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keep
control over the earth’s atmosphere.

To embark with, growing
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trees
is beneficial to restrict the run-off water of rain fall and
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reduce
the possibility of soil erosion.
Moreover
,
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plants
provide the oxygen which is,
undoubtedly
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important
for human beings. In simple words,
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planting
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trees
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help
to
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make
environment safe through controlling the air pollution.
For instance
, according to a survey, it
is observed
that, the percentage of air pollution has
been found
less in the specific
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area
, where there are numbers of
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trees
planted as compared to the
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area
where
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just
few
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plants
have
been grown
.

In addition
,
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planting
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helps
to minimize the heat and provides better environment. It is not neglected that gardens bring nature closer and
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make
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people
to have pleasure. In Chandigarh,
for example
, Rock garden is the best garden which nowadays becomes the main attraction for the
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people
.
Thus
, to lead better healthy
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lives
, it is
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very
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important
to grow more and more
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plants
in the cities to sustain the ecosystem.

To conclude
, I support that
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planting
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trees
in the open spaces of urban
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area
is more essential to
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reduce
the climate hazards and
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keep
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people
healthy.
Did you mean: "In the future"?
In future
, due to rising temperature, there are chances to face the worst conditions of global warming.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people think that planting trees in open spaces in cities and towns is more important than building houses. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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