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First impressions are important. some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. to what extent do you agree or disagree. v.2

First impressions are important. some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. v. 2
An interview is the one of the most important parts of recruiting process. Therefore, it is believed that impressing interviewer at the first time is the key success to get a wanted job. I partly agree with the aforementioned idea. Even though first impression is vital, other qualities are also play an integral role in securing a desired position. Some people might hold the view that first impression is the first filter of the evaluator, before going through other information given. Given that appearance, outfit, manner, and facial expressions can indicate candidate’s potential as an employee. Furthermore, first impression is easy to identify and takes less effort in evaluation compared to other methods. What is more, the way candidate represents themselves with stranger can simply illustrate how they are going to present themselves and the company in front of clients or partners after they have secured the job. For example, this quality is a fundamental skill that sales person should process in order to impress their customers at the first time. On the other hand, some of personality traits that are essential for working cannot predict within 10 minutes interview. For instance, people skill, tolerance to pressure, and responsibility, these soft skills, cannot be judge in short amount of time. Moreover, human resource unit has to evaluate every applicant fairly by bringing other components on the table to justify whether which one of candidates is perfectly match the job’s requirements. For example, educational backgrounds, recommendation from previous supervisor, and working performance. To conclude, even though first impression could lead to success in interview process. I, personally, think that other soft and hard skills are required in order to successfully secure the job.
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important
parts of recruiting process.
Therefore
, it
is believed
that impressing interviewer at the
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first
time is the key success to
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get
a wanted
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job
. I partly
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agree
with the aforementioned
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idea
.
Even though
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first
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impression
is vital,
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other
qualities are
also
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play
an integral role in securing a desired position.

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Some
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people
might hold the view that
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first
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impression
is the
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first
filter of the evaluator,
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before
going through
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other
information
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given
.
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Given
that appearance, outfit, manner, and facial expressions can indicate candidate’s potential as an employee.
Furthermore
,
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first
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impression
is easy to identify and takes less effort in evaluation compared to
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other
methods.
What is more
, the way candidate represents themselves with stranger can
simply
illustrate how they are going to present themselves and the
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company
in front of clients or partners after they have secured the
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job
.
For example
, this quality is a fundamental
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skill
that sales person should process in order to impress their customers at the
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first
time.

On the
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other
hand,
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some of personality
traits that are essential for working cannot predict within 10 minutes interview.
For instance
,
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people
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skill
, tolerance to pressure, and responsibility, these soft
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skills
, cannot be judge in short amount of time.
Moreover
, human resource unit
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has to
evaluate every applicant
fairly
by bringing
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other
components on the table to justify whether which one of candidates is
perfectly
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match
the
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job’s
requirements.
For example
, educational backgrounds, recommendation from previous supervisor, and working performance.

To conclude
,
even though
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first
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impression
could lead to success in interview process. I,
personally
,
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think
that
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other
soft and
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hard
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skills
are required
in order to
successfully
secure the
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job
.
21Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay First impressions are important. some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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