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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform? v.1

Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform? v. 1
Nowadays, dress-code is consider a critical aspect in schools. While there are institutes which have adopted a tough uniform policy, others have loose policy about it. This essay will discuss both the benefits and drawback of attire at schools. There are numerous advantages of compliance with a school outfit. Specific dress-code brings punctuality among students. Wearing a same uniform daily arise a sense of responsibility and better code of conduct in their daily hours of school. In addition to punctual behavior, it helps maintain and develop a sense of equality among students; thus resulting in a better academic performance. Wearing off same uniform diminishes the difference between higher and lower status individuals; resulting in achieving satisfying performance in studies. For instance, a recent survey has revealed that children who are restricted to the same outfit are more proficient in their studies owing to the sense of equality they feel among their peers. Overall, following a specific dress up is propitious in terms of punctuality and sense of equality. However, adopting specific wear off results in stress among students. Following strict attire rules arise a mental stress, as students are already struggling with their academic performance. For example, strict dress regulation may be considered burden by many students. Another drawback is the inability of students to show their own personality. If individuals are obliged to wear the exact apparel instructed by the school authority, they will be unable to show their own personal character through dressing. Therefore, school apparel obligation is detrimental, owing to the mental stress and lack of showing a personal character. In conclusion, is dress-code an important obligations by schools? This essay discussed the potential positive and negative effects of school attire as bringing punctuality and diminished differences among students, and depression and unable to show personal character respectively.
Nowadays, dress-code is
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consider
a critical aspect in
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schools
. While there are institutes which have adopted a tough uniform policy, others have loose policy about it. This essay will discuss both the benefits and drawback of attire at schools.

There are numerous advantages of compliance with a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
outfit. Specific dress-code brings punctuality among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
. Wearing a same uniform daily arise a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sense
of responsibility and better code of conduct in their daily hours of
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school
.
In addition
to punctual behavior, it
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helps
maintain and develop a
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sense
of equality among
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students
;
thus
resulting in a better academic performance. Wearing off same uniform diminishes the difference between higher and lower status individuals; resulting in achieving satisfying performance in studies.
For instance
, a recent survey has revealed that children who
are restricted
to the same outfit are more proficient in their studies owing to the
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sense
of equality they feel among their peers.
Overall
, following a specific dress up is propitious in terms of punctuality and
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sense
of equality.

However
, adopting specific wear off results in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
among
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students
. Following strict attire
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rules
arise a mental
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stress
, as
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students
are already struggling with their academic performance.
For example
, strict dress regulation may
be considered
burden by
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many
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students
. Another drawback is the inability of
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students
to
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show
their
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own
personality. If individuals
are obliged
to wear the exact apparel instructed by the
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school
authority, they will be unable to
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show
their
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own
personal character through dressing.
Therefore
,
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school
apparel obligation is detrimental, owing to the mental
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stress
and lack of showing a personal character.

In conclusion
, is dress-code an
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important
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obligations
by
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schools
? This essay discussed the potential
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positive
and
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negative
effects of
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school
attire as bringing punctuality and diminished differences among
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students
, and depression and unable to
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show
personal character
respectively
.
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18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dress code. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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