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Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. v. 1
It is thought that thinking of the future is time-wasting so a concentration of the reality is more significant. As supposed to them, I disagree with the idea that it is unnecessary for people to have an aim for their dreams hereafter. Initially, a preparation for the future will bring motivation and inspiration in order to keep conducting what they want to. They will be willing to be risky to pass every barricade even it is uphill by means of their enthusiasm as well as afflatus. If they don't own any futurity projects, they just spend time on trivial things so they will have a vague future. For instance, Barbara McClintock, who is a famous female scientist, has been dreaming of being a physicist when she was young. Then she started to work harder to make her dream real. She spared days and months on doing an experiment, taking part in a science club and finishing scientific homework until midnight. Obviously, because she had a lucid ambition, she always tried her best to complete everything regarding science. Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I also believe that persons who have a decision for the future will practice themselves many virtues during planning. Following dreams and targets is not easy so they have to be patient. When there are unexpected problems or something make them unable to understand, instead of ignoring, they will find out until they comprehended. Moreover, creativity is one of the good qualities they gradually become. They make use of this virtuousness to create new and wonderful products. Consequently, these two moral excellences may help people to work in any stressful environments. Overall, I suppose that future planning is crucial on account of its encouragement of motive and incentive besides personality improvement.
It is
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that thinking of the
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future
is time-wasting
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so
a concentration of the reality is more significant. As supposed to them, I disagree with the
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idea
that it is unnecessary for
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people
to have an aim for their dreams hereafter.

Initially
, a preparation for the
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future
will bring motivation and inspiration in order to
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keep
conducting what they want to. They will be willing to be risky to pass every barricade even it is uphill by means of their enthusiasm
as well
as afflatus. If they don't
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own
any futurity projects, they
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just
spend time on trivial things
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so
they will have a vague
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future
.
For instance
, Barbara
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McClintock
, who is a
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famous
female scientist, has been dreaming of being a physicist when she was young. Then she
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started
to work harder to
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make
her dream real. She spared days and months on doing an experiment, taking part in a science club and finishing scientific homework until midnight.
Obviously
,
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because
she had a lucid ambition, she always tried her best to complete everything regarding science.

Apart from the practical concerns expressed above, I
also
believe that persons who have a decision for the
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future
will practice themselves
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many
virtues during planning. Following dreams and targets is not easy
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so
they
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have to
be patient. When there
are unexpected
problems or something
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make
them unable to understand,
instead
of ignoring, they will find out until they comprehended.
Moreover
, creativity is one of the
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good
qualities they
gradually
become. They
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make
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use
of this virtuousness to create new and wonderful products.
Consequently
, these two moral
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excellences
may
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help
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people
to work in any stressful environments.

Overall
, I suppose that
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future
planning is crucial on account of its encouragement of motive and incentive
besides
personality improvement.
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IELTS essay Some people think that planning for future is a waste of time. They believe it is more important to focus on the present. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
295 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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