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Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.8

Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. v. 8
A section of people believes that physical strength is crucial for sporting success, whereas others are of the opinion that mental power is the most vital. In my perspective, both mental and physical strength is pivotal to achieving success in sport. This essay will examine both views with relevant examples to buttress my stand. To start with, physical strength is a very import aspect of not just sports but healthy living. It is through this that one’s ability, physique and expertise in a particular sport is built, harnessed and honed through hours of rigorous practice. This can be done by painstakingly going to the gym, running, jogging, skipping and engaging in other tedious exercises which also helps in keeping the heart and other vital body cells fit. To exemplify, a 2015 survey by the world football governing body, FIFA showed that a natural born footballer who is not physically strong is most likely to lose form. On the other hand, mental strength is a vital quality that is required of any sports person if success must be gained. It is through this knack that one pushes his body past the pain, the suffering and strenuous training routines. This can be nicknamed ‘the ability to not give up’. During a boxing bout, for instance, surveys carried out by the World Boxing Federation (WBF) showed that even though boxers may lift the same amount of weight, have the same punching power it is their mental strength that stands them apart. This is the distinguishing factor: the ability to endure more punches than your opponent. In conclusion, both abilities are important for reaching any set goal in sport because although the physical power builds one physiological abilities, it is his mental strength that pushes him past the pain. So to attain success, a combination of mental and physical strength is needed.
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people
believes that
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physical
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strength
is crucial for sporting
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success
, whereas others are of the opinion that
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mental
power is the most vital. In my perspective, both
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mental
and
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physical
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strength
is pivotal to achieving
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success
in
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sport
. This essay will examine both views with relevant examples to buttress my stand.

To
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start
with,
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physical
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strength
is a
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very
import aspect of not
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just
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sports
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but
healthy living. It is through this that one’s
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ability
, physique and expertise in a particular
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sport
is built
, harnessed and honed through hours of rigorous practice. This can
be done
by
painstakingly
going to the gym, running, jogging, skipping and engaging in
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other
tedious exercises which
also
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helps
in keeping the heart and
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other
vital body cells fit. To exemplify, a 2015 survey by the world football governing body, FIFA
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showed
that a
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natural born
footballer who is not
physically
strong is most likely to lose form.

On the
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other
hand,
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mental
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strength
is a vital quality that
is required
of any
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sports
person if
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success
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must
be gained
. It is through this knack that one pushes his body past the pain, the suffering and strenuous training routines. This can
be nicknamed
‘the
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ability
to not give up’. During a boxing bout,
for instance
, surveys carried out by the World Boxing Federation (WBF)
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showed
that
even though
boxers may lift the same amount of weight, have the same punching power it is their
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mental
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strength
that stands them apart. This is the distinguishing factor: the
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ability
to endure more punches than your opponent.

In conclusion
, both
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abilities
are
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important
for reaching any set goal in
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sport
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because
although the
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physical
power builds one physiological
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abilities
, it is his
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mental
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strength
that pushes him past the pain.
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So
to attain
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success
, a combination of
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mental
and
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physical
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strength
is needed
.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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